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AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Beyond preposterous

Couldn't you have made this story have some glimmer of reality or believeability?? By the way, football expert, it's "Linebacker", not line backer.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Way to go!

Finally, someone had enough balls to write a story that makes the husband a winner instead of a hopeless idiot. The story was too short though!

zed0zed0over 13 years ago
Well Uhhhhhh.....

At least it wasn't one of your usual wimp tales, although you seemed to pander to your inner pussy by leaving the ending open enough to allow a probable wimp out later. At least you managed not to dishonor the armed forces, but I expect the local pro football team would not welcome you to one of their games if they had read this story. You used to be one of the better writers on this sight, but your stories have become male bashing tomes of idiots and wimps. With your current fetish of having your wife fuck someone else and then reconciling, leads me to suggest that you might want a doctor to check your testosterone levels, as well as getting checked out for dementia, Alzheimer's, or just plain senility.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Pure racism

Every so often we get a story so racist in it's theme that I wonder if Himler hadn't written it. When did blacks become the boogie men in these so-called cuckold tales?

michael1950michael1950over 13 years ago
About time

Anonymous is a wimp, and a racist,You have put it very well when you threatened the rapists. A shotgun blast would give those scum what they need an audience with a vengeful God, and a trip to hell. But I digress I do not normally take such a violent stand but rapist's deserve what they get, or worse. And for the non-consent crowd (rapist's) go to hell. Sorry to take so long but I really like a man who stands up to these uppity nigger lover cucks. If they were treated like men then fine but these so called bulls are a waste of breath. I am a racist when it comes to rapists, be they black white or red, A human racist, who doesn't want their sperm in the gene pool. Perhaps my language is a little harsh but this is an adult site, live with it, wimps.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
just plain..

..crap

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Amazing!

The story is not the amazing thing. The amazing element is the commenters who manage to find racism, and largely ignore the patently disgusting behavior of the wives AND the clearly illegal actions of the scam artists who use drugs and nonconsensual sexual activity to humiliate unwilling husbands in order to gratify the perverse desires of the perpetrators.

The story, itself, is actually very good and is plausibly presented.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Good story

I'am amazed at the negative comments about racism etc. Where are the same people for the stories where the big hung black guys get the white women and rape hubby etc? They only seem to get upset when hubby fights back and wins. They are simply hypocrites.

I liked the story, it was well written. It had clear a clear hero and clear bad guys. Hero won over the bad. Classic good story telling.

I would have liked more resolution with Jan. She clearly had gone over to the bad and needed to be dealt with more forcefully and with fir finality. Either she had to get shot or killed or have it come out that she had been given aids by the bulls she fucked. Perhaps that coukd have been the fear that Grace would have to deal with as in did she get it too?

A epilogue might have been good with what came of all this. Perhaps frank takes out Jan in murder suicide when after he's found out the truth.

Again nice story I enjoyed reading it.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Racist?

REALLY?

So interacial cuckold stories without revenge are NOT racist? Would it make it better if the hubby got fucked in the end?

Start calling the rest of these stories racist too and you might have a point. Until then , cry me a river

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
what

what a piece of crap but up to your standards which are as low as e person can get.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
where did the shotgun come from?

he was tied up, then untied and watched, than brought to bedroom and watched, and then suddenly pulls out the magical shotgun from thin air!

and for the cries of racism, there is a bit of stereotyping, but nothing a bad as you say. there is a whole lot more racism in most interracial stories here - but no one says they are racist!

size14shoesize14shoeover 13 years ago
To answer a question..

Q. "When did blacks become the boogie men in these so-called cuckold tales?"

A. You must be new to Lit. Try reading a few of the other cuck tales and you will see when blacks became the "boogie men." One story in 20 maybe has the black male have any morals or ethics. You, yes you Mr. Anonymous, blacks seem to think that married, white pussy is your birthright.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Seems like the stories only becomes racist...

When the white guy stops taking the shit dished out from the guys with the big black sausages. As long as they're the ones dishing out steriotype crap everything is so Kool though, good even.

MikelGMikelGover 13 years ago
Enough

If white wives are this stupid/cruel and are open to this cuckold life style, I guess I do just do not get it.

But interracial sex is no longer taboo and I am amazed at how many writers still get off on it in LW or are they stereotyping the LW vision of the black man.

ALWAYS NEGATIVE!

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Wow racism at its worst...

Not talking about the story talking about the comments. Its amazing how many people find "racism" in these stories rather then just a story. Bad enough everyone avoids the "N" word unless of course its a black person saying it. Oh well we were slaves for 400 years. What does that have to do with the story, I don't see the blacks being slaves.

People these are stories take them as they are. If the couple was black and the guys were white it be the "white" man taking advantage of the black couple. When people start judging a story only based on color then you all have a problem. Bad enough I have to deal with disagreeing with Obama and I am a racist. Nevermind if he was white I would just be an everyday american practicing my god given right given to me by the constitution. But the President is black, nevermind your a racist bastard then. idiots.

BobNbobbiBobNbobbiover 13 years ago
Intersting

I think it would almost make an hour long cop show or even a B+ grade movie. Not bad at all Grey Eagle, could be spruced up a bit, but on the whole a not bad script for a cop show.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Bullshit

What a bunch of bullshit. Waste of time.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Needs rewrite

See title

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
So boring, So lame

I was bored and yawning by the time he called his "FBI employed" brother. Seriously dude this sucked!

.:BBWCupCake:.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
cut and pasted

from a few other 2 star stories. Wake us up when you have an original or interesting thought.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago

If anyone can ignore the blatent Racism by the wives in the story and if you can accept that some really sick middle aged white wives do get off on fucking black men and cuckolding their husbands(Who they 'love' apparently) with their black lovers. Just look around the site and see the White Middle aged wives leaving comments praising IR stories that have white wives getting knocked up by black men. Then you can take this story as a well written story about a really fucked up group of people. No one comes out a hero in the story.

PostScriptorPostScriptorover 13 years ago
I'm suspicious...

that this story was intended to be a subtle spoof.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
adolescent nonsense

6th grade drivel, guess you have to be 18 to read from this site but not to submit to it

jasonnhjasonnhover 13 years ago
Hilarious

I find it very funny that commenter's would call this story racist. There is a strong running theme in erotic literature about white women who fall under the spell of a black man with a big cock (BBC). There are some story sites dedicated to this type of story. The black man is portrayed as very arrogant and supremely confidant in his ability to "own" the white woman. Often the black man is stealing money and hooking the woman up to drugs and prostitution. Usually the husband is helpless to do anything about it. I personally find these stories idiotic although I'm sure that somewhere there are some white women and black men that act like this. I have no interest in the stories and don't find them erotic. <br><br>

This story simply takes the same theme and lets the husband not be a loser. He knows what is going on and sets it up with the police to capture all the bad guys. Why is this story racist and the others not? Because the white husband is not a wimp? The people in this story are all dumb, arrogant asses. The wife being completely manipulated by her sister into drugging, restraining, and humiliating her husband and still trying to claim that she "loves" him is pathetic drivel but completely fits into this type of story. We even have the sissy brother in law. This type of story requires the characters to be dumber than a rock and very self centered. It all fits. I'm glad to see the husband be able to turn the tables. Get over the racist crap.

shaun4shaun4over 13 years ago
zero stars

no more of this rubbish PLEASE

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
spare me

people who thinks this story is racist really need to get a life. I didn't find it very erotic however and am getting very sick of how the cuckolding theme becomes demonized and deciding unerotic. Just stick with sex please and get rid of stupid things like FBI agents, etc. It ruins the eroticism of the story.

TXanyTXanyover 13 years ago
Great with a fun twist...

I laughed out loud as I read all the wimpy whining...if you have read a lot of critical comments on loving wife stories you know they usually bitch because a cuck has no balls. Now, when one clearly has no interest in being a cuck, they bitch because he outsmarts them and somehow, because he dis so that makes the author a racist. Now I better understand the type of person who is behind the bulk of the venemous comments left by anonymouses on most loving wife stories...I thought your story was believable and more reflective of the real world than most loving wife stories.

Write more.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Grace

The whore jumping in front of the gun meant nothing at that point. Kick her flithy nigger fucking diseased cunt as far as he can. I hoped you had quit writing.

tcitalianguytcitalianguyover 13 years ago
If this is racist......

What about the stories that black men potray they are dominant over white men and women? Come on racism is believing one's race is superior than another.

So let me ask this question.... If a black man taking control of a white woman who is married and demeaning the white husband isn't that racism? People throw the racist card out all the time now because they don't know the meaning.

So I applaud this author he used a realistic scenario which I have seen played out in my hometown. This black guy took white girls and drugged and raped them repeatedly then they were turned into prostitutes. It took the police two years to bust the guy and now he rots in a prison sell for kidnapping, rape, and various other charges.

Personally the woman should be subservient the fucking feminists started out with equality in the work place and now they want to move to the household and relationship roles.

EspressoBolusEspressoBolusover 13 years ago
Flamers

Why do flamers almost post as anonymous? It isn't as though one's real name and address appear on your comments. Enjoyable fantasy of how we would all like things to go if we found outselves in such a situation.

PistolpackinpetePistolpackinpeteover 13 years ago
If you put some effort into it it could be o.k. but with no backstory, tension build-up, character development...

etc. what could it be but shitty? The premise is a fucking stretch so a story like this needs extra effort but perhaps postscriptor is correct.

gatorhermitgatorhermitover 13 years ago
The wife in this story is too stupid to be credible

She must have an IQ of at least 60. However, perhaps Grey Eagle is attempting to provide an antidote to the epidemic of boring formulaic cuck stories that have been plaguing this site.

The problem with all of these stories is that women go for the relationship first, then the sex. Only a few writers seem to get this.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
I Think

You give niggers way too much credit.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
i liked this one

no one should expect the other to not reciprocate in cheating on the marriage. all ok if all parties agree but of course what would an old married man know about life anyway. write some more ill surely take a peep at the stories nice to see a sommat different about cuckolding

ron

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Duz he get ti suck cock?

Tis guy is a wimp and always will be a wimp. I can't wait until they turn the tables on him and give him his due

digdaddyrichdigdaddyrichover 13 years ago
unusual ending

a good quick story that's fast moving. The twist at the end of the story was unexpected and different.

Thanks for the entertaining story.

teh568teh568over 13 years ago
Interesting Story

This story has a nice twist at the end, but what I would really like to see is a continuation. Something that will tell us if she was knocked-up or even if he could forgive her for doing this, or for being so totally STUPID!

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
i agree

niggers should all go back to africa where they belong i curse our ancestors for ever bringing them here

PistolpackinpetePistolpackinpeteover 13 years ago
I see dig daddy dialed you number 7 on the old....

comment Rolodex. He's only used that one three times this month!

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
manure

Author actually took the time to write this crap; would have been better served spending that time staring at a wall, this story could not be more lame.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
crap

try writing something erotic maybe, I dunno, that's what this site is for...ya think?

Vulcan_in_OhioVulcan_in_Ohioover 13 years ago
Needs a part 2 . . .

This story needs a part 2. It leaves a lot of loose ends, as many have already stated. The reader would like some sort of wrap-up -- what happens to the married individuals? How does our hero get his chastity device off? I assume Grace would be charged with illegal restraint, for drugging and then tying her husband up against his will -- I can't imagine him paying her bail (let her parents do it, so she'll have to explain to them how fucked up she is). We never learn why Frank was so easily sissified. I'll bet he was drugged and chastity-belted with one of those fictional devices that severs the genitals if the wrong code is entered in the lock . . .

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
I liked it.

I've never understood the guys who want to watch their wives fuck somebody else. I could identify with this guy. Would I like to see my wife get fucked? Yes, but only by me!

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Nice!

Great story... loved it!! Thanks!

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago

ROCK ON!

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
you rushed it way too much

the story line is so ridulous that you could'nt possibly have pulled if off with such a rushed job. Why would a perfectly normal and sane wife turn suddenly into a moronic scum? No logic there... and everyone is perfectly willing to kidnap, and rape someone so they can rot in jain for the rest of their lives? Why? all your readers can assume is that their all psycho idiots... so who cares.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Welcome Back

Two stories in a couple of weeks after such a long break - be still my beating heart!

I really don't understand why any author submits to Literotica - most of them get torn to shreds. Ignore them and keep writing.

Thanks, Hammerlane

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
story has a...

shit smell, godawful crap

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Thanks

When so many authors, lately, seem to want to take intelligent, educated men and put them in a situation where they become willing cucks...thanks, I have never met an educated wimp. Some guys fall for it temporarily out of denial that they have lost their wives to adultery but even these guys wake up, get revenge or just sadly walk away! Thanks again - no wimps!

deadonedeadoneover 13 years ago
stunning

I loved the story! Loved the red herrings.

SleeplessinMD3SleeplessinMD3over 13 years ago
Why give Grave any credit?

She called the crooked black cops who were going to kill all of the people there so why would she get any credit? Actually, she should be chargedd with assault (drugging him) and unlawful imprisonment (locking him up in the chair). This marriage was dead the moment she called her sister. Once again you are trying to salvage something from a horror story -these people are monsters!

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Dog shit

If I wanted a bitch. I would have went and bought a DOG....

BigJohn601BigJohn601about 13 years ago
Still the guy turned out to be wimp..

Why didn't he kill the bastards? He had ample cause and no jury would have convicted him.

DunaDunaalmost 13 years ago

He was on a secret FBI action and he kills somebody he gots punishment.

RonRWoodRonRWoodover 12 years ago
Okay

I can see that you were trying to show what could happen if the old making the husband into a dominated cuckold was done without his permission and willingness. It works just about as well as trying to make a woman fuck other men just for her husband's fantasy. Or forcing someone to become a swinger when they don't want to. It doesn't work because that is just one or the other's fantasy! She calls two black cops that were just waiting to be called...what a riot. Jan should have been killed in this story...by the hero's wife!

BetterEndingBetterEndingover 12 years ago
Glad I Read It

First, I liked the premise and seeing the husband come out as the hero. Good to see a man with some balls rather than all of the pansies in many other stories.

Second, the story was not racist but some of the comments sure are. I am ashamed that the human race has not yet put that behind us. There are still too many ignorant people in this world. The story does carry on the stereotype of black males going after white wives, but many do that and I do not see such complaints when the husband becomes a cuckold.

It also carries on the false notion that black men, on average, have bigger junk than white men. Of course, there is no complaining of racism about that.

However, I thought there were too many things missing. I would like to see the wife explain to the husband why she went down that path. I suspect she was brainwashed by her sister, but the reasoning could have been explored.

Also, I would like to have read about whether he left or gave her another chance and his reasoning for whichever decision he made. I could live with either result. I thought that perhaps she did not care about him any more since she had withheld sex for so long. However, that could have been prep work for the domination that was to follow and part of the plan she had been brainwashed into. Her jumping in front of the gun was a defining moment. How many of us would do that or would do it if we did not really love someone.

More description of how the FBI became involved would have been good. Given the timing in the story, that might have been difficult. However, that is something that could have been included in a conversation between husband and wife after everyone left.

Finally, there is Frank and Jan. My ending has Jan pregnant by one of the Bulls. When Frank comes down off of the drugs he has been fed and were no longer available, he realizes what he has allowed to happen and blows his own brains out. Since his life insurance policy does not pay in case of suicide, Jan is left virtually penniless to raise her bastard child. Due to the media attention to the case, her family and friends all disown her. That would be JUSTICE!

Keep writing. Thanks!

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
HI IM BILLY

PLEASE HELP MY CAPS LOCK FOR THE LOVE OF GOD HELP ME

tazz317tazz317over 12 years ago
DONT TRY AND MESS WITH THE BULLS

especially if they have horns. TK U MLJ LV NV

Huedogg2Huedogg2about 12 years ago
this shit was more racist dribble

Why do you have to use black guys in your faggot assed stories.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
FUCK YOU HUEDOG

Why not use niggers in the stories? Look at all the niggers writing their racist shit on here.. if you don't like it.. keep your mouth shut.

betrayedbylovebetrayedbyloveabout 12 years ago
Asshole story

Bulls and cucks. What a bunch of bullshit. Couple of assholes want to fuck married women and make their husbands subservient to it. One intelligent husband figured it out. Blew the whistle on the scam. Good. Everyone goes to jail. Fuck 'em

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Racist dribble

Agree with Huedog totally. This is a racist dribble.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
niggers and their white trash cunts are scum

I hope every fucking dumn cheating whore and nigger gets beaten to a pulp and humiliated in the worst way and begs to die. These fucking queers [niggers and white trash slut women hoe] are an insult to scum, they take pleasure in destroying and humiliating the weak [men with low self esteem and less physical and emotional strength]. I'd destroy these shitbags easily.

TavadelphinTavadelphinabout 11 years ago
Bizarre -

I don't car about the racist bent - it illustrates it from both side s evenly - all despicable -

But the pace was way to insane - from asking a question to the whole assault in the house and then the fake arrest to a supposed real one - but we never heard or saw anyone arrive to disarm the cops who had real loaded weapons -

Neat trick with one round in the 12ga so the chamber was then empty - but whatever - to little wind down with a very rushed finish explanation of too much info -

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
What's to think about?

Once he had the shot gun it was time to start executing them. One by one until they were all dead! There should have been at least 5 rounds in the gun - one for each of them! Not for the cheating, for the unlawful imprisonment, the attempted rape and assault and battery. That is good enough to kill them all!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
Castle Defense?

He should have just blown them all away. Then test the theory of using the Castle Defense in his trial. But then it was all a sting wasn't it? I really hope this was a work of fiction.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago

Now that is more like it! A story a few steps closer to realism. A story that is not permeated with the inflamatory theme that men are basically gullible dolts and are ready to dismiss attacks against their masculinity at the drop of a hat.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
Chastity belt

Might want to get it removed before he walks to far away

Drbeamer3333Drbeamer3333almost 11 years ago

A simple tale. Thanks for the effort.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
hell yeah

andale pues! even when they are locked up, homies got balls. its a good point too, if you truly love your husband you don't lock him up in a chastity device and you especially don't make him suck another niggas junk. that's bs, true love puts the other person first. that goes both ways btw, if more vatos were truly putting their hyna first and visa versa then there wouldn't be no need for crap like this

freeman82freeman82almost 11 years ago
Too rushed, too much deus ex machina

A nice idea, but I really would loved to have seen it fleshed out a bit more. As it is, the FBI suddenly appearing, the glock, it gives the feeling of a rushed story with elements thrown in to let the husband keep his self worth.

OneShotOneOneShotOnealmost 11 years ago
Someone could write a thesis

on the need of so many writers on this site to have their protaganist cuckolded by black men. But enough about that piece of pathology.

Any man who would even consider taking back a woman who cheated on him, drugged him and kidnapped him is beyond pathetic. Baby or no baby.

The rest of the story was rushed underdeveloped nonsense.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
black bull niggerotica

no idea why some people like this shit

I think they might be sick in the fuckin' head

phil2213phil2213over 10 years ago
Very confusing and it didn't flow or make sense.

I couldn't get my head around it.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Suggestion

Think of a rewrite of this one... You have an excellent story and with some refinement it would or could be top drawer...

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
BULL

shit. 0 *

lonerancherlonerancherover 10 years ago
Great story

I read the complaints/comments. This is my favorite story, that said I wish it was longer and wrapped up some issues. Some think the true cops would have shot people knowing that other cops were there to take their lives.These bad cops wanted to live too not die in a gunfight!! His wife Jan that wanted to cuckold him was going to Jail too. When the cops left all the blacks were going in cuffs and the woman and sissy too. His ass was covered he had the FBI and state police there probably for hours. He and the law knew the score so this is why he did not watch her mix his drink. The act of drugging him sealed her fate to Jail regardless of outcome unless she was killed.

The blacks all of them were fried this is why he asked Jan to call the police they needed to catch any cops involved. They suspected Jan would not dial 911,this also sealed her fate as a sealed member of this, like a made man in the mob. I think this story can only end with Jan her sister and her sisters husband in prison for a time. The blacks for much longer like 20 years just on the large sum of money that they stole from a bank. That makes it federal thus day for day no parole. Jan may also go to federal on the checks too. He knew his marriage and life with Jan was over at one thirty that morning.

phil2213phil2213over 10 years ago
What is this??

I couldn't get my head around it. Sorry.

rightbankrightbankabout 10 years ago
There is no story here

just a confused bit of racist babbling. Too over the top to take seriously.

ifeanyiifeanyiabout 10 years ago
are you racist ?

I've read at least two of your stories where you paint an ugly picture of a black man.

This one is the worst !

The home-wrecker does not necessarily have to be black.

3 stars! Should be 5 but you chose black men as the bad guys

ifeanyiifeanyiabout 10 years ago

You may not be a racist after all ! I just read the comment made by jasonnh that suggests that white women falling under the spell of BBC is a common theme in erotic literature.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Hmm

For some time now, I've had a strong suspicion about this type of story and the "bbc" theme. I suspect these stories are mostly written by fags who vicariously live out their fantasies about getting nailed by a big black dick. It's not about making some black dude the bad guy (tho stats might bear that out in reality), it's about some fag who hasn't mustered the intestinal fortitude to move to San Francisco and fully engage in the rump ranging lifestyle they so desperately crave. It's also about demeaning women (who the fags hate, quite obviously, because of the competition for cock.) Damn I'm good...where's my Nobel prize?? lol

Tim413Tim413almost 10 years ago
You idiots!

The black stuff wasn't even part of the story until the end. The bulls could have been black and/or white. The author chose to make them all black to enhance his conspiracy theory. And hubby isn't going to take her back is he? (Unless he forgot to get a pre-nup.)

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
horrible

Oh man this is a horrible story. So violent. You're a monster.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
good shit

damn please continue!!!!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
just get it done

kill every one of the motherfuckers in the room leaving grace untill last. then ram the barrel of the mossberg up her cunt and look into her eyes as you say "I'll see you in hell you cheating cunt" then pull the trigger and blow her cheating ass to hell. Mybe if you're lucky she will last for a while and you can watch her suffer in agony before she dies. So end all cheating cunts.

Tw0Cr0wsTw0Cr0wsover 9 years ago
overblown theatrics

Instead of the overblown theatrics he should have followed this advice from The Good The Bad And The Ugly: (Tuco) When you have to shoot, shoot. Don't talk.

When they are all dead, you can tell it your way without fear of contradiction.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
i agree with an earlier comment

Year blow each and every one of these motherfuckers to hell. The only difference is that i would like to give special attention to jan. I would make Grace watch as I carved Jan into small pieces before I sent her betraying ass slowly and painfully to hell. Then Grace would enjoy the same fate. Fuck them all.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
OMG

two crows has got it exactly right. When you have to shoot shoot don't talk about it. Just blow every one of the motherfuckers to hell leaving grace till last.And then I suggest you shoot her in the gut so you can watch the cunt die slowly and painfully.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Awesome!

Being a cuckold is cool for some idiots?? Wrong fucking answer, cool for nobody. If a wife thinks she needs to cuckold her husband, he needs to kick her ass to the curb asap and move on. Marriage has to be 50/50 and have trust, there may be some crazy kink to it but that cuckold bullshit don't work period.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
whatta a frigging degenerate moron you must be

may you die from the green monkey disease.

this must be ur self cucky auto-bio

1 star

fifteen16fifteen16over 9 years ago
Calm Down

Just read some of the previous comments, calm down calm down, it's just a story if this sort of story upsets you why read it and all this talk of guns, What about constructive comments about the story line or the writing.

Texas_Air_ForceTexas_Air_Forceover 9 years ago
Lots of things left undone and unsaid....

There is a lot of potential here to make a better story, or expand on this one with a chapter 2. For example, Jan needs to be charged as a pimp, solicitation for prostitution, human trafficking, drug dealing, attempted murder, unlawful abduction, and embezzlement (or grand theft for more than $20,000). She needs to stare at gray concrete walls for the rest of her pathetic waste of an existence. Once the state gets through with her, the IRS and the Feds can add on a few more decades for income tax evasion and wire fraud.

Mike needs to bust the so-called "business" wide open and get the names of all the other husbands that were not aware of what was about to happen to their wives and their bank accounts. He will be the town hero, and probably won't be able to pay for his own drinks for at least four years.

Grace needs to be publicly exposed for going along with the lies, and deceiving her husband. You don't claim to love your husband but come home with your clothes and hair messed up from being at any legitimate class or field trip. As a result of that, she lives alone in the cheap part of town in her little one-room apartment. And, of course, the 'bulls' should be rounded up into a corral, be castrated and branded by the friends and brothers of all the husbands they tried to destroy. Of course, the husbands all need to be in another city attending an all night poker tournament--you know, the kind where there are 20 security cameras and every dollar spent is documented by the IRS? (Federal agents make GREAT alibi witnesses...)

1papadave1papadaveover 9 years ago
nice

nice I love stories like this, I know that I would take out the bulls and take my chances with the law

Pappy7Pappy7over 9 years ago
He wouldn't raise Ali's child?

Is he nuts? Why won't she be in prison? That was unlawful restraint, conspiracy to commit theft in the amount of $5000, which is a big time felony. I might just have killed all of them anyhow, FBI or not. No way would I stay married to that stupid bitch. Wouldn't be able to close my eyes with her around. Jumped in front of him? Too little too late. Probably is pregnant and has several STD's. Not expecting a good outcome to this little tale of woe.

connoisseur29connoisseur29over 9 years ago
-3*

I was under the mistaken impression that Grey Eagle 286 was a pretty fair author. This piece of crap sure shot that idea to hell. Cheers!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
cuckolding

nice to see the cuckold come out on top. Watching one,s wife enjoying another male body should always be at the behest of the husband. Like your writing style but is wasted on short stories

Tim413413Tim413413about 9 years ago
That was really bad.

The story was okay until she spiked his drink. If they found all of this stuff on Grace's computer, how could he even think about taking her back? Didn't that also indicate she most likely had done something illegal? Additionally, why would he want to stay married to someone that stupid?

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
bull shit

why does any self respecting human want write about green monkey fuckers with aids.

UNLESS the writer itself is a green monkey fornicator with aids.

1 star, only cause rate in the minuses.

sinsational83sinsational83almost 9 years ago
A very hard pressed three stars

I started to well........enjoy the story until you fucked it up. I feel that if you were to make it a bit longer and explain what happened or came up with a good aftermath, or elaborate on how things turned out with everyone, it would have made a better story. However, you didn't do that and to me that sort of makes this story somewhat incomplete. I also thought that you were a half way decent author till I read this story. This story just doesn't live up to your talents as a writer, but, you can still fix it if you tried. perhaps add another chapter and explanation what happened I know you have the talent to do it, and you need to, so the readers aren't left with a bunch of questions. Come on do something here ok ?

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