Not scary, hot, complex action. I thought the card game and other room were underutilized, but you're right it would stretch the story pretty far. The blond joke was cute.
Good job.
It was a really fun story on the whole - a bit of circular confusion NOT part of the Georgia twist that required double checking what I read but still nice.
Clear hot sex, the reader has to accept the fundamental premise of all access all the time - a little different than the more typical no means no caveat in these fun parties.
Georgia was awesome and just barely guessed at before the actual unveiling (some of us have great imaginations or have seen too many Agatha Christie type movies lol). I would have been interested in seeing the power trip jerk, who irritated Sara, get his somewhere but whatever.
Lois sounds like fun I hope she is more than a spiritual muse -
Thanks
Steve
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Anonymous05/02/12
really hot, but wrong category
This should be under Group Sex. Also, I'd love to see more, perhaps the next halloween. I'd like to read about Georgia and the narrator (Abe?) fucking each other in the ass.
One thing that does bother me is all the apostrophes, such as 'her' cock and 'she' came. It's very annoying.
Other than that, it's an great story, five stars.
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Anonymous11/03/13
Hot story. Easy edit for respect
Fun story, very exhilarating. Would very much prefer that the pronouns used to describe Georgia weren't 'she'and 'her' quotes. It is invalidating to the characters gender identity by making her like a joke. As a transgender person it unsettled me every time. It reads like using 'it' every time instead of pronouns.
All in all i really liked the storyline and the characters were well written.
It was not a joke. Note that Georgia presented herself as a female, even in a previous encounter, and there were no quotes then. Only after she revealed her male parts did I start the quotes so readers could tell 'her' from her. She blew her cover and a few party people! I'm glad you know there was no offense intended.
English
Hot and funny
Not scary, hot, complex action. I thought the card game and other room were underutilized, but you're right it would stretch the story pretty far. The blond joke was cute.
Good job.
Nice job -
It was a really fun story on the whole - a bit of circular confusion NOT part of the Georgia twist that required double checking what I read but still nice.
Clear hot sex, the reader has to accept the fundamental premise of all access all the time - a little different than the more typical no means no caveat in these fun parties.
Georgia was awesome and just barely guessed at before the actual unveiling (some of us have great imaginations or have seen too many Agatha Christie type movies lol). I would have been interested in seeing the power trip jerk, who irritated Sara, get his somewhere but whatever.
Lois sounds like fun I hope she is more than a spiritual muse -
Thanks
Steve
really hot, but wrong category
This should be under Group Sex. Also, I'd love to see more, perhaps the next halloween. I'd like to read about Georgia and the narrator (Abe?) fucking each other in the ass.
One thing that does bother me is all the apostrophes, such as 'her' cock and 'she' came. It's very annoying.
Other than that, it's an great story, five stars.
Hot story. Easy edit for respect
Fun story, very exhilarating. Would very much prefer that the pronouns used to describe Georgia weren't 'she'and 'her' quotes. It is invalidating to the characters gender identity by making her like a joke. As a transgender person it unsettled me every time. It reads like using 'it' every time instead of pronouns.
All in all i really liked the storyline and the characters were well written.
Thanks - Happy you liked it.
It was not a joke. Note that Georgia presented herself as a female, even in a previous encounter, and there were no quotes then. Only after she revealed her male parts did I start the quotes so readers could tell 'her' from her. She blew her cover and a few party people! I'm glad you know there was no offense intended.
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