great griefs are silent

I like the title

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feel it works better as a 4 liner with article added

sweet idleness, black care
my love i commit to the air
an experimental balloon
on a wordless journey

senseless!

just a bunch of words that you think make a poem, They don't. Try again

Your balloon landed in my back yard

I mailed to the address tied on the string
the morning found more decorating lawn and trees
but I could not read the notes
through tears of joy

Egads. My heart.

reading back over these comments

makes me smile - what a diverse set!

thanks, everyone who read and left their thoughts. harry - x, 12 - made me rethink, and tsotha - egads! ha :D

Misread

I miss-read experimental as experiental. Wonder why. Liked it - good title too