this one, it has a lot of description to keep the reader involved and not many forced rhymes although I did stumble on the word 'Illumination' in the third stanza. Thanks for the read and I look forward to seeing more.
well controlled meter, comfortable rhyme, nice work
A good pace, but watch your meter. You slip out of pentameter to 11 syllables occasionally - 4th line of verse one and 2nd line of verse three.
The two 'news' in the first line are a bit weak.
The poem also assumes an understanding of welsh(?) mythology that many of your readers won't have.
Good attempt at a lament though. M
Great poem! I am a fan of your work, hope to see more "hunting the hunters" soon! Keep up the excellent work!
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