All Comments on 'Vampiric'

Not bad for a first attempt, ending is a little weak, too "romantic" for my taste. Vampires and werewolves don't generally enjoy happy endings from the same point of view as "normals" do.

Please keep writing.

(signed) Abdul

I know the end was kind of romantic but that's what I wanted. I don't always view vampires and werewolves as ruthless beasts who have sex and kill. As my stories go on they get less about the love and more about the sex.

Good start for your first story. Some more plot development would improve it. I would like to know how Megara came to be there. Was she abducted or compelled by Anastas? Was she a vampire play-thing or just an unsuspecting victim? What is the relationship between Gavin and Anastas, is there something deeper there? Nice details in the sex scene. Goodluck! :)

~Luna