Daddy Shoots Deep

Very Good!!!!!! Please write more

Fantastic start.

I can't wait to read more of this story. Please post another chapter to it soon.

That was one HOT story. From innocence to fulfledged turned on daughter; whew! I guess it would definately be an experience worth living. Will be looking for other stories from you.

Such a turn on

What a turn on.... so sexy..... there is so much more for them to do. I love the reluctant father,then lust overtakes him!

Very hot for a first submission. I love your style and am looking forward to the next installment.

good start

good first installment and now the fun and naughtiness needs to continue

Really erotic

Very well done story, I enjoyed reading about her fucking herself on her daddy's big cock.

It's a good fantasy and I had a good image in my mind from your explicit descriptions of them fucking.

A hot and sexy scene of them in his bedroom. As I read I could visualize his big cock stretching her little pussy, and then filling her with his thick goo.

thanks for sharing your thoughts.

Definately made me hard

I loved it. Love to see what else you write. This Daddy loves to be deep up inside his young daughter, filling her with seed...

Please tell me when you write another!

Oh, dear.

Daddy jizz? Daughter juice? Oy.

Thanks everyone

I absolutely am so grateful for the feedback on this story, though it's been VERY mixed. One thing that had been mentioned a few times was the female seeming to be a bit younger. That was not my intention; this is a girl of 18. Reading over this story however I see I was a little lost in the girl's innocence. I will be keeping this in mind and trying to find a better balance for my next story.

I also received feedback suggesting the daddy/daughter envelope was pushed a little too much. I think I will continue to push that envelope, but try to develop the story a bit more.

Finally, there has been a lot of feedback about sheer language. Good feedback, and not so good. I guess I tend to write a bit more explicitely than the norm on here. What can I say, some like it hot; some like it REALLY hot. I like it really REALLY hot. ;) While I am definitely serious about improving my writing skills, and I may temper the language if the story demands it, I can say with total certainty that I will never fully abandon my filthy mouth! ;)

thanks and cheers all. Working on my next story, I hope you all come back to read it!

- sarah aka goolovergirl

Don't chante the language.

Love the way you write. I wish more authors on this site would write this way, keep it up.

Oh, Sarah!...

...What a sweet little cum slut you are! Don't stop using your hot, dirty thoughts and words in your stories -- that's why we all come, and cum, to this site! So nice of you to give your untouched cunt to your daddy for your mutual pleasure. Keep your hand on your wetness while you write, and all of us will keep our hands on our hardness while we read! Great work!

True?

Hope at least some of your story is real. I'm in my horny 30's now and just started having sex with my father last week, and it is fabulous, Makes me wish he had taken my cherry years ago instead of my first boyfriend. My husband doesn't know about it, but I almost don't care if he finds out, Daddy is huge like yours, and is absolutely the best sex ever. I'm a cum lover too, especially Daddy's cum. I love it everywhere in me and on me, especially on my nipples. I love Daddy and he loves me! Kisses (french of course) from Fuck ME daddy (again and again and again)

blowd my mind!!

That was 1 of the best dam stories I ever read! U touched all the points. I truly enjoyed it. I gotta go jerkoff now ;-)

Damn! Keep the stories coming!

wonderfully sinful

Keep the stories coming! Loved the hotness of the daughter, reminded me of my years of dreaming about sex when I didn't know why I was always wet thinking of men touching me or holding me! Wished I had been taken by older men instead of the boys in high school. Open her up to neighbors, teachers and uncles. Keep her innocent but open to anything they want to do to her!!

beautiful baby

i just loved the thought of you being filled up must have more please

Hot!

Very good story. I'd like to see more from you.

WOW

HFS!! i hope i have fresh batteries in my vib!!!!!! that was amazing!!! write more fast!!!

Gerat story

I see by your name that this story is a true one.
Very well written, I loved it, keep up the good work.

What a slut!

Far out! You are all sluts and whores and perverts. Who dreams of having intercourse with their father? Creeps!

Why the hell are ~YOU~ here, Anon?

It takes little courage to libel someone under an anonymous posting but I find myself wondering....why the hell are you here? This is a site dedicated to erotic stories. Don't try to come across as sanctimonious here. You just come across as a fucking hypocrite by trying to pretend you are judging others for doing exactly what you are too fucking uptight to admit to doing yourself. At least most people here openly admit thet get off from reading the stories heres.

Nicely done.

I enjoyed the story. There are only few changes that I'd suggest as an editor. Please write more.

wow

It has been a long time since I have been on here....... I am so happy to read the comments and advice.. I am going to post another soon! Promise! I am working on it

xxoo

LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Very nice story love it cant wait for the next one i read from you!

fucking hot

Loved it. Came so hard. Oh fuck. Keep on writing!

mmmmm

i about to fuck my oldest daughter here in a few she loves her dad's big cock also.

cum

i was reading this and made myself squirt , my dad saw me and made me fuck him , it was amazing

So fucking delicious!

What a great way to introduce a virgin daughter to incestral play with her loving Daddy!!

Loved it but with reservations

Leaned toward the absurd with the daddy/daughter overkill. Still even though I giggled a little I was very turned on.

so hot

Wow that is maybe the hottest short story I have read so far!!!!!! I am soaking wetfor daddys big dick;)

DAM THAT WAS HOT

This mite will be the hotest story i have every read u did a great job keep up the good work great story.

success at last.

very well written. been there with 3 daughters. love it. more please.

I liked it a lot well written

Yes it made me cum

still want my dad

I'm 22 and still tease my dad too hoping he will lose control and make me his. I'm stacy18_bi@hotmail.com

Daddys SLUT !

That's was fucking HOT ! ... I'm an older guy who LOVES these hot Daddy/Daughter stories .... I LOVE that she was such a nasty talking little girl SLUT and that she so LOVED that hot nasty daddy cum ! !

Steve (tnmacman57@att.net)
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A bit too innocent

The concept is a good one but the execution could use some work. The girl was entirely too innocent for someone of 18. Unless she grew up under a rock there's no way she would've been that innocent.

However seeing her turn into her daddy's slut at the end was very nice.

I, for one, loved that innocence she had. It added to the story for me.

What about life after?

daddy shoots deep

wow i would give 6 stars that story was great and when you said bum that made it better

Wow! This was awesome. I creamed myself at least 3 times while reading this. I will be looking forward to your next submission.

So Hot

I wish i had the bravery to do that to my daddy!!!!!!!!

fuuuuccck

This has left me dripping all down my thighs. Amazing can't believe this is your first one, please write more! Quickly! :) Felt like i was gonna cum just reading it and could feel my juices pouring out. Brilliant.

wth thats sick man

More???

Very good writing. Wish you would write more.
You only have one submission. Wish you had more. I would read them. :'(

Great Story

Please keep writing. I will be looking forward to chapter two when Daughter joins Daddy's bed every night. Please get her on the pill as incestious babies are to be avoided. I will be watching for more from you......

oh what a story sick and perverted but made my pussy wet

Daddy shoots deep

Another erotic story.Brings back so many memories of my first time with my Daddy.
Here in Thailand it is an honor to please your Daddy.. Thank you so much xx

gotta say its a good story

I just read this and it was by accident too because it was on my friends laptop...ill be going to this site very often...I have some ideas for another story if anyones interested and please call me wolfcraft wolfraft67@yahoo.com ... I hope to get lots of emails because this is one of the greatest sites ever...oh and please no haters

Work on the language and continuity

I like the simplicity and some of the dialogue - but some of the phrases got a bit too repetitive after a while. Also, you had portrayed her as naive when she was spying, but within a very short time, she seemed to know all of the things she was unsure of a short time before. Either you have him teach her, or don't create the pretense that she doesn't know beforehand.