unless it's the start of an unwritten story
Gawd that was an a-fucking-mazing story ... So ppl get off ur high horse and enjoy it. One mistake over 12 chapters is impressive. So much fun with this story ...
Bring Jill into the mix, even though the summer is over you said she is their some-time babysitter...
I seriously can't believe you idiots would believe the author made a mistake with the epilogue/prologue.
Its pretty obvious he was emphasing the "beginning" not the "end"
Great stories, Only thing that annoyed me was not seeing Jills story, Also the charachter of Greg was kind of pointless. There was no reason for his wife to stray.
one of the best i've read on this site in a very long time....
.. but this line about gave me a seizure:
"Greg was rewarded for working things out, twice I was told, but I wasn't present for either one. I didn't like that, but I was reassured that it was ending, and being allowed to play with Beth was a nice reward for my patience."
Oh please. You fucked his wife for weeks and took her virgin asshole. Until he gets something from your wife that she never gave you no matter how much you wanted it, you have no right to be even slightly pissed at him. Frankly, Greg should be able to fuck all your wife's holes at will anytime he wants... and you still would owe him.
Hi I can see that maybe the ending was a bit rushed, but I can understand that maybe you were stuck on how to end the story? I didn't see a problem with how you introduced the others into the special arrangement set up by the wife in trying to kick start her sex life with hubby. It was nice surprise to see the wife was the mastetmind of the pool payments. It looked liked the wife wasn't prepared for how the other girls wanted a bit of the action?
I didn't like the idea of the wife wanting to square up because hubby started fucking others due to them not getting what they wanted from their husbands. The wife could of stopped the arrangement ay any time but she didnt, so she was to blame for hubby fucking the rest.
It would nice to see maybe the wife seducing the 18 yr old next door neighbor and surprising hubby and have him educate her like he did with the others?
I just wanted to say that you should bring Kayla back. I felt like there was chemisty between Alex n Kayla, so it's unethical for her to get the cold shoulder when her husband is a ol' Dude, who can't satisfy her needs as a women.
P.S. You should atleast tell us if Alex got to fuck Kayla's virgin ass. I would appreicate it.
Thanks for another Story I'd like to Star In. You've got the group, might as well go on vacation!
What if Traci wanted another sandwich? She could invite Greg again, but then Alex should get another chance with Lisa. It might even be possible that Traci wants more and invites not only Greg and Lisa, but Andrea and her husband for an enhanced group session (Beth would be invited anyway) ;)
What, no Jill? a teenage slut from next door come on man.
I want to thank you for an incredible adventure. I managed to miss the boat on reading this until now, but am glad I was able to read it as one story. While I agree with the comments that additional stories could be written based on what happened with the Greg, Lisa and Traci encounter or what will happen with Jill, summer is over, and this ending is good as any. Thank you, again!
After Beth's punishment at Traci's hand, I was sure I'd see Alex get his. After all, his betrayal was the deepest. But no. Only rewards for Alex, no matter how thoughtlessly (some would say cruelly) he put his marriage at risk.
It's funny. Whenever one of your stories features a cheating wife, she suffers the most barbaric retribution and earns forgiveness (if at all) only after paying a horrible price, even if her initial wandering were the result of coercion. On the other hand, when a husband cheats and gets found out, it's always PARTY TIME!!
Can you, perhaps, explain this in terms those of us with a sense of fairness (or who actually LIKE women) might understand? Thanks!
P.S.: Near the end of the story, you misspelled 'EPILOGUE'.
Was hoping for some jill action.. :( other than that great story and I'm currently making my way through all of your work and its quite a ride. Keep up the good work!
...you really needed to get Jill in on that. 4 and 3/4 stars for sure, but Jill would have taken it to 5. Still a hot piece, just could have been volcanic adding her to the mix.
It would have been nice to see Jill work into the story somewhere. Otherwise, though, quite a tale.
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Guess theres no chance of rewritting the last two chapters to remove the craptastic plot involving greg. Completely wrecked the first 10 chapters with that. Im actually disappointed I read this now because you added that.
Great story overall, as are many of your stories. Definitely liked that you did a summary/wrap-up at the end to put closure on some of the characters. Better than just leaving it open ended.
As others have mentioned, would love to hear about something with Jill.
Thanks for sharing your writings with us.
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