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Double Punishment Ch. 01

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous10/29/10

Loved it!

Really hot! Can't wait for more!! You know one of them wants to take her in the ass...

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by Anonymous10/29/10

good ideas, but needs polish....

Hi Explorer.....

Good concepts here... nice pace and well-thought out....but you need an editor or at least a proof-reader to correct the myriad of grammar and spelling mistakes..... let's see Chapter 02!!

Cheers

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by explorer90040810/29/10

thanks

thanks for your comments the secong chapter is coming soon and its with her boyfriend this time

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by Anonymous10/31/10

What is this?

Predictable story,far from arousing.Your spelling is horid.

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by Anonymous11/18/10

Liked It

Good story, but you need to get an editor. Your spelling needs tuning a bit but overall good story.

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by Anonymous12/01/16

are you THIS illiterate?????????????

Get an editor....get a proofreader....throw THIS in the trash!!!!

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