...all the spelling, grammar, and context errors got in the way. If not for all those errors, I would've voted a '5'; as it is, I voted a '4' [and *that* was generous].
Big advice: find an editor.
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Anonymous11/18/10
It Good
You need an editor badly. This story is good but could be better with the spelling and gramma done properly.
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Anonymous07/11/11
Cute
Very cute stories. Short and sweet and to the point (in other words, they cut to the chase and turn me on).
English
I *love* this kind of story, but...
...all the spelling, grammar, and context errors got in the way. If not for all those errors, I would've voted a '5'; as it is, I voted a '4' [and *that* was generous].
Big advice: find an editor.
It Good
You need an editor badly. This story is good but could be better with the spelling and gramma done properly.
Cute
Very cute stories. Short and sweet and to the point (in other words, they cut to the chase and turn me on).
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