but a few criticisms - first, it took way too long to get this next chapter out; secondly, it's way too short, but the quality makes up for the brevity; third, you're still dangling that good part, when Thom actually gets together with Denise, in front of our noses. And tongues. And more private parts.
I'm loving it! The only complaint I have is with the few grammatical / spelling errors.
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Anonymous01/18/11
Not bad
Not bad...too short like the others in my opinion. Also the fact that Thom and denice still havnt gotten together yet after 10 chapters is starting to get to me...I look forward to ur next chapter
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WOAH! Great story,
but a few criticisms - first, it took way too long to get this next chapter out; secondly, it's way too short, but the quality makes up for the brevity; third, you're still dangling that good part, when Thom actually gets together with Denise, in front of our noses. And tongues. And more private parts.
I'm loving it! The only complaint I have is with the few grammatical / spelling errors.
Not bad
Not bad...too short like the others in my opinion. Also the fact that Thom and denice still havnt gotten together yet after 10 chapters is starting to get to me...I look forward to ur next chapter
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