All Comments on 'The Hike'

Your story is hot as hell, but next time have someone edit for you. It would have been better if you separated out the dialogue with quotes. Would have made it an easier read and not as hard to follow. With that being said, it was good. Keep writing!

YOUR LEAD IN.."A GUY HOME FROM COLLAGE TAKES A GIRL WHILE HIKING" MY GOD EYE MUST BEE SMARTER THAN EYE THOUGH .. BEE-CAUSE , WHILE EYE HALF NEVER GONE TWO COLLAGE( given the chance) EYE WOOD KNOT HESITATE TOO TAKE A FEMALE WHILE HIKING..ANN LOOK AT ALL OF THE MONIES THAT I HAVE SAVED ... LOL!! this hear comment just proves that eye have too much free time on my hands... (-:

That was really sexy. How dumb can she be going hiking in white shorts with no undies? The perspiration alone would be humiliatingly obvious!

You built up the tension very nicely, had me squirming in my seat! I do agree about separating the dialogue to make this a little easier to read.

This is one of the best stories I've ever read on this site. The pacing and the descriptions were really amazing! Great story, seriously.

I wasn't totally crazy about the beginning. I'm not sure you totally got into his head, or hers, as much as you could have.

We really liked your story. Both of us had memories revived...Let us hear more from you..