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the weaving
entrancing music.. intricate rhyme scheme
Very Plath like!
Reminds me a lot of Hardcastle Crags. Haunting.
Submit your work
where REAL editors can see it and see what the response is without your fan club. You have loads of work to do and I doubt you can handle true constructive criticism as you do not get that here, just the sounds of your friends sucking up to get 5's in return. pitiful.... Lit will post anything and your so-called poetry is blatant proof of that!
why thankyou for your response, anonymous
most of those i've posted here have already been published. by real editors. but thanks anyway.
as for having lots of work to do, i am fully aware of that. we all do. poetry's a never ending learning curve.
cheers :)
I gave it a 5
just 'cause
I have some reservations about the overall word choice, too pat i.e.
stalking Time on soulless tracks
past nameless places
faceless windows
did I mention I gave it a 5?
'cause I'm a SOB, and comparing this score with the scores of some of the other trash, well it just didn't seem right anon, like many a singleing out sort of thing is going on, now why would that be, bunky? like where are you anon when the really bad shit shows up, and why so afraid?
Whispers, i understand now
I hear them. I'm posting from your vault and see no potion to read other comments, wondering what other ppl said. I see I've already voted
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