This is not my normal cup of tea. But I will honestly give it a try if this chapter is anything like the ones to follow. If you get to be to much for me, I'll let you know. Anyway I'll be keeping my eye out for chapter 2.
This is well-written and an interesting take on the standard training-a-sub motif: a nosy, inexperienced sub calls the Dom out of retirement/hibernation. It's an awakening for both of them, which seems like it could continue to be an interesting - and very arousing - story. Can't wait for the next chapter!
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Anonymous09/26/12
Hot Story
It's amazing how quickly you can tell a hot story. There are details there, but they're not wordy, and so I actually enjoy reading them. Processes that don't need elaborated upon aren't. It's nice! Hard to write that way, too. Thanks. :)
One technical criticism: "...and flip her over again, this time standing and letting my cock spray all over her face, tits and ass, then I turn her over and force my still throbbing cock into her mouth" was really confusing to me. She goes from on her belly to sitting up to sitting up? I don't understand. Otherwise excellent.
English
So Far So Good
This is not my normal cup of tea. But I will honestly give it a try if this chapter is anything like the ones to follow. If you get to be to much for me, I'll let you know. Anyway I'll be keeping my eye out for chapter 2.
Great start with lots of potential!
This is well-written and an interesting take on the standard training-a-sub motif: a nosy, inexperienced sub calls the Dom out of retirement/hibernation. It's an awakening for both of them, which seems like it could continue to be an interesting - and very arousing - story. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Hot Story
It's amazing how quickly you can tell a hot story. There are details there, but they're not wordy, and so I actually enjoy reading them. Processes that don't need elaborated upon aren't. It's nice! Hard to write that way, too. Thanks. :)
One technical criticism: "...and flip her over again, this time standing and letting my cock spray all over her face, tits and ass, then I turn her over and force my still throbbing cock into her mouth" was really confusing to me. She goes from on her belly to sitting up to sitting up? I don't understand. Otherwise excellent.
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