An Incest Birthday Ch. 01

have read this story before on another website

1st time?

Brother and sister only going out with each other. Neither one having dated much yet they each are very knowledgeable and proficient in oral sex and also how to totally satisfy each other. Not that realistic. Good story line. Think logically, even fanticies should build slowly. Keep writing.

Nice Start

For your first story, I think you did a good job. I'll keep my eye out for chapter 2.

great story,

Twins are in tune with each others in a lot ways that other would never believe ..... looking for the next one!!!

rushed

way to rushed this sounds more like a porno than erotica

DBRS

Please learn...

,,,the difference between 'were' and 'we're'.

Anon

God that was bad, Cheesey and every cleche i can think of.

Nice Start

But a nut before finish reading the story.

wow!

that was good a start, i hope the rest is just as good if not better!

X-Box 360

I skipped to the end of this story immediately to tell you you're gay for having an X-Box 360, he's 19, not 9. Anyways, back to the story.

Awesome!

One of the best stories I have read! Now I am off to read the rest!

Awesome

I like the story so far... you're not gay for the x-box 360, just the lame game;}

ignore the xbox

you guys are a bunch of retards if you focus on the xbox and game. good story by the way

Loved it. Can't wait to read the rest

You stole this

This is from Nivek_88 on stories.xnxx.com

to anon

did you notice Nivek is kevin spelled backwards.? Maybe he posted it on 2 sites. Doesn't mean it was stolen

Not bad..

Not bad but this sounded more like a generic porn script than a first time between 2 people with no experience at the end.

Wait Wut?

How does one win at Mario Bros?

Thief!!!

You stole this off my blog on YouNow, you better not be frofiting off my life stories.