Katie's Master Ch. 03

Sloppy Writing

I suggested earlier that you shoud print off and read and any errors will leap out at you. Here is an example: 'I ran as fast as I could but of course he was faster. I tripped on rock, stubbing my toe and falling. I hit my head my head a large rock knocking me out.' This would have read better if you had written - "I ran as fast as I culd I stubbed my toe on a rock and fell hitting my head on a large rock which knocked me out". This is better but it could still be improved on. Printing out and reading again will probably give you a lead on it. Keep writing you have imagination.