Peace for Erin

Bon apetit

That is sum dam good writin'! Makes me hungry! "with a flurry of final flailing he blew gobs of opalescent chowder into my ass." There has to be some sort of award for a sentence like that, somewhere.

Excellent

5/5 Good writing. The best I've encountered here so far.

Excellent performance in first-person pov, which in itself is hardly simple.
Great pace, great showing - took me into the ER for a few minutes.
Nice dialog, good characters, nice conflict, hot action.

Only point I have to say that too much an effort was put in creative names for hot objects and activities. Too much sometimes equal less.
Sometimes a cock is just a cock and a Jism is just a jism -
pussy, introitus, cunt, vulva - You know, it's ok to say pussy twice.

Isn't it a wonder

that someone who writes so well, so amusingly, so enticingly, also writes so beautifully, also writes realistically and manages to make it HOT! OneSilky is one in a million.

A great story. I loved the feel of speed in this. Keep it up.

Love the wordplay! Enjoyed your tip of the hat to The Raven as well.

FifthHorseman said it all

Great word play and the interuptus (sp) was terrific.

Thanks - Good fun

Yes lovely. Can I just say that I agree that there was perhaps just a few too many dictionary words. Perhaps as the mood got raunchier the verbiage would get cruder.

Ta

great story

Good luck in the contest.

Nice job

It was a nice story and quite beautiful at times. But there were a bit too many $50 words (or however that saying goes). I like using a thesaurus when I write, so don't get me wrong. But, perhaps, you could use words that the majority of your readers will understand. While I'd like to think I have a rather large vocabulary, I have to admit that I didn't understand some of the words you used. Still, it was a nice story. I wouldn't mind reading more from you in the future.

Great Fun But Overwritten

Give poor ol' Roget a break, he's plumb tuckered out. And it's Brut, as in champagne, if you mean aftershave; brute is what Erin wanted in bed. But a cute story. Erin's my kind of woman.

Beauty

An occasional reader has given ratiocination over my forlorn logorrhea. My obloquy for rubicund idioglossia is conspicuously quotidian, but nonetheless overwhelming….. a truely apopemptoclinic situation.

Great!

i liked everything about it except for gelatinous porridge and opalescent chowder, though i did appreciate your descriptiveness. It was very well written and i really felt them when they had to get up and help people. thanks for the story :)

another great read

Keep it up silky you have a awesome imagination

loved the way you described their intensity, coupled with the frequent interruptions to increase the ardor of their encounter. Great story Silky!

Very hot fun

I was a nurse for 19 years and had those same fantasies, but never got lucky with a Silky lover...