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by vrosej1011/19/10

Wow, bravo!

This is a great, juicy piece full of meaty imagery worthy of repeat readings. The mammoth lines choke the end rhyme so it is not overly obvious ( I don't enjoy end rhyme; it often sounds hokey unless well done, which you managed) and I really like your slant rhymes of territory and bee and cleft and silhouette. A big fat pat on the back for you. I am about to mention this one in recommendations.

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by twelveoone11/20/10

Erotic?

no, but downright funny.Constellation,penetration, that had me rolling, Sepia-toned ham hock thighs, why this whole thing is flavoured like cloves in a ham. As imaginary swells of violins... too much! Well deserved 100!

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