All Comments on 'The Last Fall'

Spirit of the season, and I wasn't expecting the ending ( probably because of the category ) Well done.

Well, I got bored reading this, but instead of clicking the back buton, I scrolled down to the last paragraph.

And I'm really glad I did. This was cute.

Re-reading it, knowing what was comming, I also have to say it was pretty clever. The clues are there, but I completely missed them.

I clicked on this by accident. I never read non-erotic stories. I was trying to read the story above it.

Only, as I started reading the story, maybe because of the holiday and because my Dad hasn't been gone that long, I couldn't help but think of my Dad. We went through Hell and back between midnight ambulance rides, hospital stays, and nursing homes.

Still, I'm glad I did that for him, as I hope my children will do that for me.

Even though all the clues are there, rooftop, snow, place up north, toy business, handmade toys, red clothes, sleigh, Christmas cookies, Rudolph the Red Nosed reindeer, and children, I totally missed it.

Boy, was I surprised you were writing about Santa Claus (lol). Yet, I guess, he had sons, too.

This was a great story and a big surprise. Thanks. Happy Thanksgiving.

Thank you for reading, voting, and/or taking the time to comment on my story. Since my Dad experieced all of this, I had as much fun writing this, as I did sorrow.

We can't live forever.

But something in me really didn't want to. The obesity didn't give it away, nor the 'red clothes', not even the toymaker occupation, not even the liking for the snows . I'm not thick, so I'm putting it down to the excellent story-telling. If an obvious ending sneaks up on the reader, then the tale is well-told.

Not even the flying over the snowy landscape, not even the "Christopher' naming rights, and the loving of children .. maybe i am thick after all, but none of this impinged itself as clue. It was all detail lovingly supplied by an everyday son. It slid into the mind so seamlessly without pointing to the [what is blindingly obviously now] blindingly obvious.

Congratulations.

This tale combined pathos, and yes it was heart-wrenching in the extreme, with smooth delivery and an attitude of "This is what it is like for me, What is it like for you?"

Cheers, and Thanks,

Kilroy.

I loved this story,because for a short time, it came across as if you were writing about my Dad... He also had a very giving nature , as did my Mother.. May they, R I P ..SUSAN YOU REALLY DO HAVE A SPECIAL GIFT FOR WRITING.. REGARDLESS OF THE SUBJECT MATTER, YOU CHOOSE TO WRITE ABOUT ... YOUR FANS CAN COUNT ON THE STORY BEING; WELL WRITTEN, VERY INTERESTING & WORTH READING.. THANKS FOR SHARING.. JOE

I never saw it coming. Santa Claus!Of coarse! You are a genius.You dropped just the right amount of hints.I have to admit I don't know why I did'nt quess.A sweet story with a lot of soul .You are a very competent writer!

good story great writing but no my kind of story. but none the less.

just for the story and the writing top marks go to you. jr

Really touched me - my dad is currently going through this, and I am experiencing all those same emotions. Difficult to know what the right thing is to do, day by day. As children of elderly parents, we have "no previous experiences" in these matters.

what utter, utter garbage.

More garbage from one of Literotica's leading garbage producers...BOSTONFICTIONWRITER! Once again, he's put on his "girl" costume and is trying to pass the first of MANY stories that will be entered into this contest as the work of one of his exes'. GIVE US A BREAK FREDDIE! Pretty much the only positive comments that will be posted on an andtheend story are going to be from BFW alts. Everyone else can see this for the drivel and refuse that it is. A waste of contest space and an utter waste of time as well.

Please, Laurel and Manu! End the misery for your worthwhile contibuting authors. Please get rid of BostonFictionWriter (and all alts) and Scouries (and all alts.) Clean up your contests, clean up your forums, and make Literotica a fun place to be again. Get rid of the rabble-rousers/shit stirrers/whiny idiots.

I'd like to thank all my fans for your continued voting support in pissing off the two bashers below (lol).

Thank you for reading, voting, and/or taking the time to comment on my stories.

Happy Thanksgiving to all, even the bashers, since they are the real turkeys (lol).

"Gobble, gobble."

The telling was like a child trying to grow up. Very nice! I liked it!

The critics probably want him having at daddy's reindeer.

My first non-erotic story. I must admit I was going to click the close tab button but I clicked at the wrong place. So, I decided to give it a try.

The story was really great and nice. I almost missed the clues as well. I thought only once that probably it is our Mr. Santa. But, then I thought what is a Santa doing in a non-erotic story.(No offense, but I have never read one before.)

Keep it up. Good Luck for contest. I loved it.

What a great ending! Merry Christmas and good luck in the contest.

I loved the story. I hope it comes in the top three.

Why is the voting turned off on all your red H stories? It's as though you turned off the voting just in time to freeze those little red Hs. But isn't that against the rules of Literotica? You can only have the red H if you LEAVE THE VOTING TURNED ON.

Strangely enough, Bostonfictionwriter has done the same thing with all of his red H stories.

Actually, it is not against the rules of Literotica to turn off the voting. What it does though is excludes me from winning the contest.

Why do I turn off the voting? Because of whackos like you who take pleasure in erasing the red H's of authors that have spent time and considerable effort to write free stories for the pleasure of readers. Many authors have turned off the voting on their red H stories, PrincessErin for one.

Now, let me ask you a question? Why are you such an asshole on Thanksgiving Day. What did your mother do to raise such a miserable fuck as yourself to piss on everyone's story.

Your IP address has been reported.

Have a happy holiday.

I really liked this one - and once I got the punchline the Gene Autry reference was even better. Well done. Amazingly this is one on Literotica I'm going to copy and paste as my Mom would get a real kick out of it.

really loved it!