All Comments on 'Bruised'

Miss Lynn...You hit it right on the head...so many women that are bruised hate the pain yet come back for more. I feel for them, I was once there. You understand, so that makes your writing so real and believable! I enjoy and have enjoyed everything you have written. Thank you for you and your lovely talent! Your friend...Beau

You've stuck to the concrete pretty damn well for a poetry newbie. Watch the cliches and you be writing them with the best soon. :) You're gunna get a mention in recommendations.

you are not a poet, why attempt it? It does make sense, and it is a good tactic to open and close with your best. I'll show you a quick trick:

A myriad of colors

Their secret

The marks she craves

this says what you want, the rest is not needed

Start and end with the strongest lines

Another great poem!!

brings pleasure to both. TK U MLJ LV NV

Disagree with 1201 (how dare I ?). Not everything has to pared back to the bare bones: some of us like a bit of flesh and padding. This was a fine example of that little bit extra which makes the verse more complete and rounded.