A Tale Of Many Mistakes Ch. 06

Faster please

Keep them coming but hurry up with the story. Just when it starts getting good... it ends. Needs more.

It's time he got his head out of his ARSE!

I hope it is permant progress.

Mary should have tortured her mother more after finally understanding a slice of what her father experienced. Eileen deserves to suffer alot more. I was hoping that this story would lead to the whore's suicide but it looks like a reconciliation ending. Too bad.

So far I like it

Pretty believable and not quite as much soap opera as some other peoples work.

Yeah, there will be a reconciliation but in this case it is one I can believe would happen. It won't be at any cost because everyone has already paid plenty. Looking forward to see what develops. :-)

Not an answer to critics

I received a comment saying that this chapter puts some critics back in their place when the daughter expressed how sorry she feels now that she understand the pain lived by a scorned spouse.
Not really, the story was written at the end of August, early september, way before the comments were made.
I forgot to mention my thanks to grogers7 for editing the story.

The story has finally

gone to hell. I gave it 1 star. What a wimp after 5 years of pain.

SC

So, it's the old tried and tested accident..

.. that leads to the RAAC. Extensively used by experts and amateurs alike and totally predictable... BOOORING.

So she's a nurse, does her job, and suddenly 18 months of fucking around is forgotten...

Don't like it, sorry.

Perhaps as his body heals so will his heart

With the care being given to him by his daughter and his ex-wife, he may give up all of the hate he has for his ex-wife and finally heal the wound in his heart.

Good chapter, thanks

Hey, I really like where this seems to be heading!!!

Generally I am a Torch the Bitch type of fellow, but I do believe you've taken the pain far enough for a type of reconciliation to begin. Good Work!!!

Not suffered enough

Eileen made a horrendous mistake letting herself be seduced by a predator during her period of concern about getting old and ugly. Divorce is not enough punishment for her. She should be stripped and beaten once a week in a public place. The practice of branding needs to be restored and an "A" branded in her forehead. After 5 years of torture and humiliation she should be injected with the AIDS virus and let die a slow death. Just before she dies her tits should be torn off. Would this be enough punishment?

Great Story!

I love a writer who can develop reach living charecters and tie it to a believable story line. You have done that and more. Please keep the chapters coming.

oh funny

I guess likegoodwine is as old as me and has read the same story I did some......ages ago. And like in the other story, when the writer could not find a way out with his characters who were unable to go on with life, the guy had a bad accident and the happy end is saved. good night and sleep well the bedtime story for all the little kiddies is over.

I like it....

I'm enjoying this tale, although I feel a bit miffed that each installment is now just one page. It appears that the author is trying to squeeze it out painfully slow. As to RAAC, I don't understand how that can be. Any cost? Hasn't there been enough pain and suffering - what more can a reader need to feel vindicated? Hell, get them back together already, lol.

re: oh funny

I happen to agree with you. I don't remember the name of that story you mentioned, but it was about a miner who goes inside the mine for a rescue mission while his wife fucks around. Years later the same incident happens, and this time his now ex-wife stands outside the mine with their daughter. The miner gets injurred and his now ex-wife take him to their old house, looks after him, and also fucks him. The plot is almost very similar to that story.

It was Coal Miner, by DG Hear.

Good writing, And a good read.

But, if this truly is going to be a story where the writer gest the couple back together again. Well so be it. Anyway good story and thanks for writing.

Just as I predicted

I predicted this a few stories ago......I predicted that Eileen being a nurce, that he would get in an accident and she would have to take care of him and they would get back together.....these stories are so predictable.....

I enjoy it.

Blue is correct that the chapters are far too short. The plot is not new, but it creates emotion, so it is working. We all use the same few plots and just try to add of alter some part of it to tell a story. This story is a good early effort and you will enjoy a lot of popularity here.

Fate

The heart wants what the heart wants, logic and pride be damned.

If the story was completed in August author:

Why is it being submitted one little chapter at a time. While the story is good your formatting is becomming a negitive distraction? Mike in Missouri

pointless story about...

a loser, no way to root for this protagonist and no way to root for the whore wife, make any more chapters about Mary - Kieran and Eileen are irritating and provoke nausea at this point

predictable

predictable

What!!!!

My God, you had a great story going...but the last 2 chapters have killed it. Is it so hard to believe that the husband could do so much better. This is turning into nothing but a big wimp story. Sorry I wasted my time, I will not waste any more. What a shame.

So what

if it is predictable. It has turned into a good story. I'm enjoying it.

Thank you.

Damn

He started with balls. It seems they have shriveled up. They have medicine for that now. I would ask the doctor to check and see if he still has them, but they were gone before the wreck. A fucking year and half. Nothing but blue skies and creampies from now on. What a sad bastard.

Yep let the slut take care of you and then whem your well enoughget the fuckout of Dodge away from the that cheating whore. I Kirean stay it only means a wimp cuckhold and enjoys eating another mans sperm out of the bitches slimey skanky diease ridden cunt

Don't Judge......

the auther. If you have ever had a woman capture your soul, there is nothing you can do to get her out of your heart.

Oooooooohhhh! This saga is melting!

A tale of many mistakes...took a major detour and did not follow the theme or the title of the story. No one has really made a mistake in the last couple of chapters. Oh what could have been...kieran's doctor could have been Eileen's fuck toy who had to deal with Kieran as a patient as Eileen watched and worried. Oh what could have been...Eileen discovering Mary's husband's betrayal (rather than Mary) and dealing with that angst and irony...giving a wonderful further dark layer to the story. Obviously there are a plethora of what could have beens. I just wish the last few chapters continued with the descent of the two characters into their own personal hells. But it is not my story. I sorta liked the feint of the daughters tragedy vs the potential harm and subsequent feelings Kieran felt for Eileen's welfare, but even then, no tale of many mistakes...saccharine and zwieback. I assume we are nearing a coda or have reached an ending. Thank you likegodwine, I have thoroughly enjoyed your craftsmanship. Bravo!

Well, this is turning into a steaming pile.

Reconciliation stories are OK, when they are logical and have a definite flow. This doesn't -- unless you're setting us up. There were five chapters of his anger and finally indifference, none of which would logically lead to a reconciliation. So, instead of trying to write something that took a little brains or talent, we are presented with a forced situation. It is a tired cliche of him being dependent on her, of her healing him, and love returning. That is boring, trite, and piss-poor writing. Face it, the crash was a deus ex machina device.

As I said, unless you're setting us up, that she will heal him, but they will not get back together, that instead of using the cliche you set it up but go the opposite direction.

I don't think Kieren is a "wimp". It is hard to turn off emotions for someone you have loved for 20+ years, no matter what they have done. And Eileen seems truely remorseful about what she did. People screw up every single day, they loose sight of what is important and do things they never thought they would do.

It's obvious that Kieran still loves his wife, despite the betrayal. And Eileen, despite her faults, loves him just as much. Love is not their problem, rebuilding trust will be the major hurdle.

Not surprised by the accident ploy

One little quibble; opening a person up (to find out what is wrong) does not happen these days. While trauma is not my field, I do know that a 3 minute CT scan will show all the main internal injuries. This (as well as ch 05) was too short, as others have also commented. Thanks for writing.

So its predictable - like a good wine : )

Sorry couldn't help myself with that line but to say a predictable story is like a good wine you pretty much know what a specific bottle is going to taste like but you still enjoy and it my be better than you imagined!!!!
Good read worth the time and I am enjoying it! Very impressed how you picked up speed of submissions. I assumed you would keep about same pattern nice surprise that not everything is predictable like this story as well. It still had and I am sure has some twists!!! So keep writing so I can keep reading. Thank you

Like a good wine? You mean like THUNDERBIRD wine... the drink of drunkards?

Harry nailed it again.

The husband is so pathetic that even when his stupid dumb as shit arrogant daughter sees the light he doesnt know to do with it.

For 5 years the daughter shit all over he loser father.

Just as Harry saw, the husband is a loser for 5 years and cannot pick his nose withoutn breaking down or freaking out. Now that he is back with his cheating wife... he will be fine

To Wimp or Not To Wimp?

I have a bad feeling he may have lost his nads in the crash. Or maybe the shot to the head made him realize he never had a pair, which is why she started fucking around on him in the first place. Anyway, a very suspenseful build up, I am looking forward to, yet dreading the ending at the same time.

Love and Hate

Love and hate are strongly linked. You always get the angriest at those you love (think kids, siblings, and spouses). But that's not really love and hate, but love and anger.
Love and hate happens in divorces--you see it everyday. Yes, we all have faults, arguments, and make mistakes. And sometimes divorces happen when we grow apart.
But, Eileen didn't make a mistake. She deliberately cheated through an affair. She may still love Kieran but I'm certainly not interested in that type of love. Keep me in the hospital or place me in a care facility, but do NOT let my care fall to an exwife I never wish to speak to again. She died during the cheating and the divorce...

You have a terrific story going here

Really enjoying this read and the speed you write your chapters allows us readers continuity as we read from chapter to chapter. Wonderful story many more chapters please maybe double pages?

Enjoyed it

But I have to admit that reconciliation is on the horizon and that we have quite a bit of deja vu, but then if he had a violent reaction and died while trying to escape from the hated woman then we would also have deja vu... Has anyone come up a different torch the bitch story,lately?

THEY HAVE ALL BEEN WRITTEN

What the write does is choose setting and tones. This writer is doing a fine job..

One thing that worries me is that the commentaries gives me the impression that being in love = wimpishness for most of us.

Give us another chapter

Please

Wonderful !

Simply wonderful writing by skilled Author with remarkable insight into human interactions. Most enjoyable !

Clown Kieran

I think in a way, she was fond of me and liked the peaceful surroundings of my country estate. She was full of life and always spent at least half a day, and sometimes the night with me. She always took good care of my physical needs.

So what happened to the nice young escort that liked him and cared for him? Oh yea, shes just another female, another bitch.

So far in this story Kieran has proven himself to be a self obsessed arsehole. What a wanker!

Hard-edged disclosure of feelings

because they too are hard edged. Just why Kieran is such a stiff prig in defense of his own pain escapes me -- life never provides such rigid choices, and obligations -- not to say the vow "for better or for worse" -- impose on everyone a need to reach decisions in consonance with what's best, not what's "right." His excessive anger in defense of the institution of marriage, even his date's unstable marriage, signifies he has a lot yet to learn about being human. So keep him at it! Write more! Maybe by old age and a wasted life he'll learn that human needs create tragedies and comedies alike, not merely opportunities to feel betrayed and so to practice high dudgeon.

THE TRUTH ALWAYS LURKS IN THE DEPTHS

just aching for an exit to the former self. TK U MLJ LV NV

Please!!! Don';t do it!!!!!!!

Don't get them back together mPlease, She doesn't deserve it. He doesn't desreve her cheating ass

Five years & he's still a bitter lonely old man! He's still dwelling on the slut --this is a reconciliation story & it blows chunks! The author didn't even try to pick the husband up, dust him off & try again. Instead the author portrays the ex-husband as a drunken loser who refuses to move on. Not cool dude! The husband should've been in love & remarried not a complete loser who can't find happiness unless its with a whore who cheats on him all because she saw a few fucking wrinkles & gray hairs. It's pathetic!

"Sighs"

Damn. Not much to add to what Danger09 said. One more chapter.

Forgiveness

I see a reconciliation coming and I am all for it. People always want to point the finger at someone else's mistakes and say that they deserve whatever punishment comes their way, but when it is their own mistakes in the forefront they wish people would understand and show compassion. I have made many mistakes in my lifetime (some of them REALLY big) and I always remember the people who forgave me. In fact, the fact that they forgave me when I didn't deserve it makes me not want to disappoint them ever again. My mother always used this scenario with me: Who is more grateful? The guy who is forgiven a $10 debt or the guy who is forgiven a $1000 debt? Its not up to anyone to say what another person deserves if you are not a part of the situation. Especially if the wrong doer apologizes and makes amends. You wouldn't want to be judged like that when you are the one who needs forgiving.

Bullshit

So in other words, Javmor, I can do anything I feel like doing (lie, cheat, steal) and all I have to do is ask forgiveness? What about consequences and retribution? You may forgive a criminal, but I feel they must still do prison time. And, by the way, fucking around on your spouse is not a mistake, it's a deliberate treacherous act.

Loving it

The accident as a device to force reconciliation. I can see that, but five years is a long time.

thoughtless

Not one mention of the other passenger. Every one of your characters are self absorbed assholes....I frankly, don't give a shit what the hell happens to any of them. You've lost me.

There was no other passenger

He was on his way back home after taking the escort back to town.