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Anonymous05/18/12
a little advice...
i only read half of this before i had to stop. not to be rude or anything but you still have a lot to learn about the basics of writing. other than things such as syntax, grammer, etc, the story (of what i read) is ok.
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Unreadable!!
I started to read your story but the first paragraph, which was a single unending sentence, was just unreadable. "Gawp?" a little esoteric, and British!!! You've written a lot of stories. Surely you can do better!!!!
happy endings!
I really enjoyed this story. You have a very vibrant way of writing, as in previous stories. In this case, it was short and sweet like the yummiest gay treat. I like that there is usually a top/bottom power dynamic in your stories, surely here, and as 100% bottom myself, I quite liked this story. I want to model porn later, and I think its wonderful that you included that.
http://bubblepopmei.blogspot.com/
a little advice...
i only read half of this before i had to stop. not to be rude or anything but you still have a lot to learn about the basics of writing. other than things such as syntax, grammer, etc, the story (of what i read) is ok.
hot as hell
as i read your story it made me so hot i have wanted to do porn movies with another man i want to suck a cock so bad i know i would be good at it an i want anal sex i want the whole nine yards
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