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OK but not great...
I really liked your story "Editorial Indiscretion" so I was curious as to why this story is (so far) only rated at 3.5. Here's my feedback: This story is written from a 2nd person perspective, which makes it difficult for many readers to relate to the story. Aside from some brief physical description there is no character development - who are these people; how did they meet and interact before today? Also the story is very short - I prefer at least a full page or two. However, you do have a nice writing style - no technical problems that I observed and the sex scene is certainly steamy. Please do keep on writing!
Re: OK but not great
Thanks for your nice words about "Editorial Indiscretion". That story was fun to write.
I wouldn't dignify "Our First Encounter" by calling it a story. I think vignette is the proper term because, as you point out, it lacks most of the dramatic elements needed for a proper story.
I originally wrote it as a response to that coy question sometimes posed by ladies online: "What would you do if we met?" or some variant thereof. It has proven to be a nice conversation starter. I'm glad you described it as steamy, because that was my exact intent when I wrote it.
And thanks also for your encouragement to continue writing. I am working on a story I would like to post soon but it is a longer piece and I don't want to leave the reader hanging on Chapter Five. "No wine before its time" as the old Galo commercial used to say. I need to get it right before I post it. I hope you are still tuned in then.
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