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Good Story but....
it is accept not except. You should accept everything you want except those things you can't have! Also - women don't have hyphens - they have hymens. I loved the story but your grammar and spelling detracted from it.
Agree with Mona..just check your spelling.
Also think the sex could have been longer, more detailed, etc like the rest of the story. I really love stories like this so please write more kidnap/hate kidnapper/fall for kidnapper.
Story is good
The story is good but you need to proof read. There are a lot of spelling errors.
GET an editor!!!!!!!
awesome
I love this story despite the errors it made my heart swell and my panties soaked at the same time.
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