I enjoyed reading the beginning of this good series.
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Anonymous06/05/12
no good
it got way to unrealistic toward the end of page two. when she left to go to her room he would have also gone to his even though she told him to stay. when she came back with the viberator and said she was going to masterbate he would have got up and gone to his room and started to look for a place to live. way to unrealistic and rushed.
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Fantastic!
Really looking forward to the next chapter.
Good Story
Very erotic beginning, look forward to chapter 2.
NICELY DONE
AS ALL GOOD WRITERS YOU WRITE TO SLOW... LOL....MORE PLEASE
Excellent story
I enjoyed reading the beginning of this good series.
Thanks
no good
it got way to unrealistic toward the end of page two. when she left to go to her room he would have also gone to his even though she told him to stay. when she came back with the viberator and said she was going to masterbate he would have got up and gone to his room and started to look for a place to live. way to unrealistic and rushed.
nice start
even though he seems a bit immature for a guy in his 50s
let's hope he joins in with the agenda his sister is suggesting
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