Baby It's Cold Outside

Afterwards ......

Matt picked up Angels phone a hit rediAl. After a brief pause Angels mom answered. Matt said "I just wanted to thank you for the wonderful gift you sent over! Oh! And the pie was excellent too!" THANKS FOR A GREAT STORY

LOVING IT!!

Such a beautiful love story.... what happens after Elizabeth called her mother. Do continue on writing this story its to good to stand alone.... it definitely needs more chapters

The plot would be more believable if just after she got there her Jeep died and then they were snowed in for a week.

In that way you could allow the story to unfold over a matter of several days and make it more believable.

This needs some serious editing...

and a bit of push and pull between the characters. As perviously stated, it would be a lot more believable if everything happened over the course of a week- It's just too much too soon at the moment :)

Great Story

Please keep the story going! Great so far!

Thumbs up

I found myself saying "hmmm this is so cheesy" in several parts but i ended up really liking it!

smirk

definition smirk: A smirk refers to a smile evoking insolence, scorn, or offensive smugness. Not the appropriate word when they were making love for the first time. Otherwise, a good story, but that just kind of jarred.

Beat me to the punch

Damn, was planning on writing a story like this based on the song. Guess it's too late now. Oh well, nice job anyway.

lovely short story befitting a giddy schoolgirl. damn, i'm a giddy schoolgirl.

and smirk can simply mean a devious smile in this context.

This was a super gentle love story. granted there is love at first sight, but I felt that the pace from first meeting on the threshold of tthe cabin to love making was a little too quick. A more believable scenario would have been, to be snowed in and the course of events to develop over 24/36 hours. Well written though I did enjoy the story and could easily see further episodes.

Too rushed

Really cute story and I loved all the scenes however it was way too rushed. You should make more chapters that are longer.