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wow
Just wow. I'm gobsmacked, and very wet.
Sense of smell
No one captures the odors, aromas, stenches and fragrances better than you do. You conjure a visceral immediacy in the story. When you wrote of the streetsmells exploding in the rain, I felt a burst of sensory memory. Together with the woman's trepidation, the close sweaty atmosphere and throng, the aromatic atmosphere evokes a sensual other-worldliness.
It promises to be a wild ride.
Subtle
It's a good story - worthy of publication. I agree with the earlier comment, that you evoke the sights, smells and sensations of the place very well. The fact that the sex is hinted at, rather than described explicitly, is a plus for me. I hope you write more in this style.
This is exquisite
Gentle, it draws the reader right into the place, and makes you guess at the relationship between the man and woman.
The ending was perfect. It left me teetering on the brink, wondering what was going to happen next. It begs for a sequel. Pretty please, Scottie?
I'm always amazed
that this is my lowest-scoring story on Lit.
I know that it's one of my very best.
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