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"Soap and cigars" is an odd combination.
But it is a distinctive one, and one that appeals to the olfactory imagination, which very few poems do. The closing line seems to be a slightly jokey double entendre--Poet Guy hopes that it was intended to be amusing. He might suggest that you rearrange your line breaks a bit, as some of the lines seem too short both rhythmically and in terms of image and/or information (e.g., "He's reading" or "too late"). But Poet Guy is only one reader, so you will want to take that comment as mere comment, one hopes.
I LIKED this one.
For me the cigars and soap smell thing worked; it was unexpected and vivid. This poem made me truly horny, a rare thing given how much erotic poetry I read. Good stuff. This one's being recommended.
I adored this
a beautiful evocation of evanescence. Although it is such a question of taste, I too would run the odd line over particularly the opening two lines which I think would be lovely as one.
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you do know the last line can be read two ways;
plucks the daisy
there's hope
there's no hope
there's hope
there's no hope
...for me
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