All Comments on 'Son's Friend'

The writer needs to go back and do some serious work of corrections. Things like "4.55" as a time reference that should be "4:55" and then the localized ism's the confuse rather than present the story, nonstandard international spelling for words like "tyres" for which the world uses "tires" again do harm to reading.

Almost every paragraph is an extended run-on sentence, with a series of commas used instead of periods. It's very distracting and really hurts an otherwise promising story.

It is obvious that english is not the authors first language. No worries the content is still hot and the story line easy o follow. The translated quality adds an old world feel that adds to the story. With time I hope the author would clean up the grammatical deficiencies of his future works. The effort is appreciated.

that such parochial and petty comments should replace genuine constructive criticism. "International" spelling is precisely that and not US English. Perhaps the contibutors of the comments could constructively spend some time on a subject called geography and perhaps view a world atlas. "Tires" means to become fatigued. "Tyres" are the rubberised compound circular objects that prevent your CAR not dragging it's "arse" on the "floor" ("deck" being the upper surface of a ship). :-) Author - ignore ill concieved comments and concentrate on your skill.

i agree with anon thanks for writing in english not american keep on writing this way it makes for a much nicer read which is why i gave it 5*

loved i...tt

While I agree that the comments about the spelling is not needed for technically its all correct.

However, The comments is also correct to a certain point of view. 'Tyres' is indeed the plural form of 'tire' - the rubbery substance around the wheel of a car. Phonetically though, all one need to do to plural tire is add an s making it 'tires'.

Tire has two definitions in the English language dictionary. 1 is exhaustion and fatigue. 2 is the rubbery substance around the wheel of a car.

I chosen to look up this in the English Language Dictionary and not the Americana Dictionary which will be slightly different.

I concur that one should not 'nick-pick' a story to death as Americans would put it. They should judge a story on its content. Only when such grammatical errors become too atrocious should it be commented upon.

I for one thoroughly enjoyed the story as a whole so much so I gave it 5 out of 5 stars.

One more thing, don't put much stock to comments - just write for the sheer enjoyment of it. After all, no one is paying you for these stories to who cares what they think as long you like it.

Thanks for the read,

John

it happens..thank gawd!!

"I'm not going to say it was 10" long and 5" thick like you read about in those silly stories." Yes, your story is not silly...

The only thing that would make this reasonable would be to state: THAT SHE DID EVERYTHING SHE COULD TO GET HIM TO EVEN THINK ABOUT DOING ANYTHING AND IF HE DIDN'T RESPOND TO BREAK A GLASS AND TELL HIM SHE WOULD TELL HIS PARENTS THAT HE BROKE THEM IF HE DIDN;T fuck HER!!!!!!!!!!