by greenmountaineer
I didn't get the last stanza. Maybe it was just me, but it seemed to vague and it's a pity because I could tell you were leading up to something good. Put me out of my misery and email me. I really want to know what you meant. :)
Actually, the last quatrain does look a little overstated; 1 and 2 killer, nice rhyme thoughout
"Heavy" and thought-provoking poem with an interesting and appropriate form--Poet Guy finds the meter especially well-suited to the subject, with its uncertain beat and uneven lines. This also makes the rhyme less sing-song, and almost dirge-like. As with 1201 and Vee, Poet Guy finds the closing quatrain obscure, however.