All Comments on 'susurrus'

over some of your stylistic choices, which seem a little too consciously arty to Poet Guy's sensibility (though, notably arch and arty himself, this could be his hypersensitivity). For example, the inversion "fountain naked" does not add any meaning nor beauty of phrasing over the more conventional "naked fountain," so unless Poet Guy is missing something, this phrasing merely seems twee. Similarly "bespeak" seems artificially quaint as well. Poet Guy also believes that "raiment" is effectively plural without the additional trailing "s"--one would not say "clothings" nor "apparels," which are synonyms.

Poet Guy finds this promising, but suggests some of the filigree be trimmed.

The language is a bit pretentious but i actually think that suits the tone of the piece. Will be recommending this.

A delicate and beautiful piece. Thank you for sharing.