Under The Mistletoe Ch. 02

1 star

she just wants to fuck around , his birthday has nothing to do with it . Hope she gets HIV.

Interesting but...

The chapters are to short. Mike in Missouri

Too short

You need to put two or three chapters together.

"one star" that bloke gets flamed everyday.

Highly flammable fellow. I wonder if anyone can guess why?

1

for stringing us along. u give us a taste every 5 days? stickit where the sun dont shine. as a dr seeing sick people u think i will remember names or plot in 5 days?/ get real.

I love suspense!

I love to be entertained & the suspense is great! Forget the other readers - they want instant gratification - like many in our society today!

I can't wait until the next chapter!!!

No I don't want instant gratification....

but I do insist on a modicum of English grammar. I couldn't get past the tense switches. He "is" this and in the next sentence he "was" that? Take a composition course.

Words

I believe the word you want is 'whether'.

A 'wether' is a castrated ram; look it up.

I have nothing against slow build but this is weak. She introduces Savannah as a "patient" then refers to her as a "friend". So which is it? Because if Savannah is really a patient she is putting herself in a bad spot career -wise....especially if she brigns her into their bedroom.

Left High and Dry!

- Hate it when I invest my time in reading a story and the writer doesn't bother to finish it! - Booooooooooooo! Hiss!