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I Love This Story!
Because this is a masterpiece with regards to storyline, erotic details, and lesbian romance.
needs some work
The story needs some work to remove lines that drag on far too long mostly with repeated words that anyone with 2 brain cells gets the message after but a couple. Like: 'Aaahhh... Aaahhh... Aaahhh... Ooohhh... Ahhh... Ooohhh... Ummm... Yeaahhh... Yeaaahhhh... YEAAAHHH... OOOOHHHH... OOOHHHH...
Hyphens
You really need to work on your hyphen usage. There is no need for spaces between hyphens unless you mean for there to be some sort of pause there. Not horrid otherwise.
I Love This Story!
The Storyline is very impressive, moving, saucy and erotic. Good Job!
Thumbs up
... for another beautifully written lesbian incest story .
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