I would have said so if it had been page 1 of a larger story. It isn't; you're right it sucks. In real life a good person has cancer (again). In real life there was a concert and a hot recorder player, but we didn't even flirt in real life. Know what? Real life sucks too, sometimes.
for what it's worth, I thought the story was exquisite. The mark of as good writer, is imaginative creativity, which allows the potential to find reality in artistic representation. This story is all that, and more. A little editorial assistance wouldn't go astray (hard to find one's own inconsistencies, I know). For instance, second paragraph: 'my reaction was, "Yeah sure, why not?"' would be correct. But, I'm not quibbling, gentle author. Your writing is divine.
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Is that IT?? If it is that SUCKS!! If it is the first page of a longer story the YOU SHOULD SAY SO!!
Don't leave us hanging after setting up such a nice potential story.
Big, That's It
I would have said so if it had been page 1 of a larger story. It isn't; you're right it sucks. In real life a good person has cancer (again). In real life there was a concert and a hot recorder player, but we didn't even flirt in real life. Know what? Real life sucks too, sometimes.
Life does suck, but…
At least, sometimes, it provides good writing fodder…
Is your friend with cancer still fighting?
And keep asking your wife, even if she has to say no. Trust me, there's nothing worse than not being asked.
Love and light to you and all of yours.
Well...
for what it's worth, I thought the story was exquisite. The mark of as good writer, is imaginative creativity, which allows the potential to find reality in artistic representation. This story is all that, and more. A little editorial assistance wouldn't go astray (hard to find one's own inconsistencies, I know). For instance, second paragraph: 'my reaction was, "Yeah sure, why not?"' would be correct. But, I'm not quibbling, gentle author. Your writing is divine.
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