by Elliebelle
Your story doesn't flow. First the girl is younger than you, then older, then the same age. Your editing needs help as well. Good try though.
and ur wrong it does flow i was fingering myself before the second paragaph
Your story was fun to read. Yes it was rough around the edges and desperate for some editing, but all the same it was a strangely refreshing read. Well done, there is a place for this type of writing.
Mhmm..that ass must be beautiful! I would love if someone did that to me...😜😗😋