All Comments on 'Summer Solstice 1955'

by vrosej10

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LiarLiarabout 13 years ago
I would say...

...that introducing frogs to an erotic poem is to make it hard for yourself. But it seems to work. Nicely done.

UnderYourSpellUnderYourSpellabout 13 years ago
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Love this frogs or not! It's so descriptive of the area and the moment ... well done and more please :)

Esperanza_HidalgoEsperanza_Hidalgoabout 13 years ago
Hooray!

I keep tellin you women and frogs are better, gal. Fans self, goes to kiss wifey's sweet >>> (omitted because she may read this).

fridayamfridayamabout 13 years ago
Delicious

So concise a moment, delightfully drawn. Bravo.

AngelineAngelineabout 13 years ago
A lovely moment captured

This is both evocative and precise, something that I think is a hard balance to achieve in a poem. And that last line is just killer! Really love it.

PoetGuyPoetGuyabout 13 years ago
Poet Guy thinks this one is very good, vrosej10,

because it is composed completely of very strong images, both visual and aural. He thinks "us" in L3 should be "we" (he thinks it is the subject of the verb "joined" in the following line), but this is a small quibble. He agrees with Angeline that the last line is superb.

buttersbuttersabout 13 years ago
that last line

is knockout, v.

enjoyed the rest, and how certain words open out when their connotations are examined... like the shape and appearance of the pecan nut, the moisture of the marshlands... the one thing i'd personally quibble over is the punctuation - feels a little cluttered

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