A Journey To Remember Ch. 02

Loving it!

You've built a great plot! Keep it coming!

You still need to find an editor because your sentences are running together, and sometimes the story doesn't flow as smoothly as it should. Story flow comes with proper punctuation, proofreading, and separating of thoughts.

The plot is good, but please; do yourself a favor. Go over to the editor's forum and ask if someone will help edit your story.

good

keep it going

enjoying the story

Please continue the story, but I agree, you need an editor.

Example - "I always I imagined having you on your back"

I always imagined having you on your back. The "I" is not required.

This intriguing 'captive' theme requires a little more talent, than simple imagination

Perhaps inspired by the hit movie 'Titanic', but missing genuine Iceberg locations? May your 'Heart Go On' with this theme, with few reservations!
Albeit reader comments were well intentioned, seeking editorial help is a mandatory requirement in our view!

un viaje para recordar

buenisimo, ella esta secuestrada por un hombre belliisimo y rico, la tiene a su merced y no le da la liberacion que ella tanto anhela. que va a pasar en los siguientes capitulos que espero que muy pronto lo hagas, vos a estar con mucha ansiedad por leerlos

Nice try.

But you misuse words. Makes it really hard to enjoy a story while trying decipher meanings.