The Spoils of War Ch. 01

Longer

and fewer. Well done for starting!

5 stars

I wanna longer & fewer chapter.it's good story,please keep going

Great start

Great start, looking forward to future chapters.

gave it a five

want more!!! make the chapter longs and coming close together :)

Good Framework

I like the start of this story and will be watching for more. My only criticism at this point is this: the sentence "She was tall with a small build, but, with generous curves" makes no sense. Too many opposites.

nice

good beginning to your story... continue on with the story

Good start. I do wonder why there wouldn't have been people to insure the escape of the princesses. I don't think they would have been left to their own devices. That said, I definitely want to see what happens. I think slightly longer chapters would be good. I think it's well-written and I look forward to more.

Good Job

It's a common plot, but there is a very good reason why. It makes for an exciting play between the victor and the conquered. Nice job, keep going.

wow!

great start. i am also a member but does not have the guts to write yet. kudos to you.

please write the next chapter soon....and make it longer please... :)

MORE!

I would prefer LONGER chapters :) But I hope you can submit these chapters quickly lol. I know Lit can be a pain in the arse to post but hopefully you don't make us wait long? lol LOVED the chapter (just wished it was longer) so I can't wait for the next one! :)
I hope she kicks his ass like a hellion :)

Longer Please

and I ask this because I plan on reading much more of this story. For your first attempt, kudos. As for the longer part, here's my opinion. I think the longer chapters give me a better connection to the story and it's characters. I don't find myself having to go back and reread my notes on a story, I remember right where the story left off. Again this is only my opinion, you do what works best for you. I'm also of the opinion that I'm lucky you have chosen to share your story. Good luck with chapter 2, I'll be watching for it.

Long chapters with more details help me to identify with the characters. I will definately continue reading.

please update soon!!!!!