All Comments on 'Blackberry Sunday'

so full of luscious images and the intensity of the storm. Bravo.

Five.

Wow. This is a revelation. You need to write like this more. This is a sonically lovely and dense poem. I love the consonance. Erotic without being porn and that's fine line to walk. It's just a great poem. It's getting a recommend.

i think this is probably my favourite poem of yours so far, bronze. enjoy the overlapping of visual and taste, texture and light.

whatever they said below, interesting patterns set up; 1,2,3 and 4

Blackberry summer, blackberry Sunday,

Blackberry nipples show through your shirt.

Night rain swollen blackberries hang

Blackberry s...Blackberry s...Blackberry N..s

s..Blackberries. Not as tight in the reversed image at the bottom, but nothing is perfect. Nice contrasting with white.

1,2,3 and 4

Desperate dust devils scour the pasture

for damp leaves and sticks.

Actually a ton of good stuff, very sophisticated writing technique.

I've been giving out 100's this is worth 200.

Now if some of the other jackasses would get out and vote, it should be an 'H'

opening the portal for those who think, TK U MLJ LV NV

this one is for you Lor ;))

You need to post this at TF, if you haven't already.