but you wrote it like a thesaurus struck by lightning. Why "umbrage"? That means offense. Didn't you mean "homage"? I also needed some more background on the characters: who are they, what are they doing when they're not fucking? I love literacy and a writer who will take risks, but this was over the top.
Well Silky, it appears we have some litiary critics here, but none have volunteered to act as editor or proof reader for you.
I, too, found the descriptions over the top, but if you've read all of Silkys adventures, that's just the way she is. It's what we've come to expect from and love about Silky.
If they don't like it, they don't have to read it!
sf
English
could a story
be more exciting, scary, funny, sexy and well written? I don't think so! This is one more GREAT Silky story.
A Good Idea
but you wrote it like a thesaurus struck by lightning. Why "umbrage"? That means offense. Didn't you mean "homage"? I also needed some more background on the characters: who are they, what are they doing when they're not fucking? I love literacy and a writer who will take risks, but this was over the top.
Oh my...
Silky, the things you do, you bad girl.
Ice chips up your bottom? God, I felt faint reading it!
So so naughty...
Retitle it "My new Thesarus"
except the words are used incorrectly..sad
Well Silky, it appears we have some litiary critics here, but none have volunteered to act as editor or proof reader for you.
I, too, found the descriptions over the top, but if you've read all of Silkys adventures, that's just the way she is. It's what we've come to expect from and love about Silky.
If they don't like it, they don't have to read it!
sf
Love your vocabulary!
A true elephantocetomachy.
Toe Sex
Round one of toe exercises coming up. I wonder if a personal trainer is warranted? TOO much LOL!
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