All Comments on 'After the Earthquake'

I think this form works really well with its frightening subject (and I'm glad you are ok!). I think it could be tightened up here and there: maybe change the gerunds to simple present tense (fork dangles, chicken coop leans, dog looks edgy). Also I think maybe if you were to remove the "because" and then "cause" in the last line, the lines would sound starker and have more impact. And this is a poem whose subject deserves all the impact it can convey. Just my opinion, of course. You take care, girl!

I am unfortunately one of those people who is really prone to using them. It's a major bitch when I'm writing haiku but I haven't been paying attention. I need to. Thanks for that.

adds a line of it's own to an already delightfully topsy-turvy scene. World went a little bit mad, and now nothing is where it's expected. Not even the letters.

about those tiny tightenings making for an even stronger impact. a poem that leaves me feeling out of place having read it - loved it!