All Comments on 'Sometime'

I felt your caring and fear for this "older man" who's earned your love. Nice intimate slice of life, well done.

Now for the niggles :-) I'd have a line break after "sometimes" in the first line and again in the 6th line. "Soon" could stand alone to underline the presence of time and its brevity. I like the repetition of the word "sometime" - heck, I like the whole thing.

Tess

Five.

The anonymous five was mine.