All Comments on 'Why I Left You'

I like this: it's not overdecorated with language and yet there's a lot of meaning packed into the relatively few words you've chosen. Just my opinion, but I think you could lose a bit of excess verbiage that isn't contributing anything to the poem, like "by" in the first line and "And," where it starts lines. But overall a solid write with a strong ending. Thank you for the read!

The first thing that struck me was the use of the word 'And' at the beginning of sentences, rules even in poetry are made to be broken but I don't think your usage here helps much. It's a good read otherwise and I know just what you mean!

it need to go on a bit of a diet though. I got some advice a few years ago which has proven useful: every word in a poem should lift weight. That means that you should kind of concentrate your words, losing as many of the connective words as you can whilst still maintaining sense and not coming out sound like a telegraph. This one shows promise.

Five.