Is it so hard to type A-N-D? Stop overusing the ampersand!
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Anonymous01/19/11
Go read Shakespeare
What is wrong with you people???? What's wrong with &&&&??? Why does everyone keep harping on this? It means AND! It's the SAME THING!!! And it's a website for erotic literature. This story is hot no matter if there are &s or $s or any other symbols! Go read Shakespeare if you're looking for perfection!
awesome love it daddy and ivy chapter two i could have gone on writing even more you had my cock so hard it hurt
but worth all the pain. reading this was like taking part getting the same of feeling about ivy. only wish there where more of this incredible hot horny story. brilliant thank you you very cleaver girl you. love your stories and the writing. most excellent.
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Anonymous06/24/11
wow
i am soo wet!! finished the last chapter with my hands in my panties...
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Anonymous04/07/12
Omg
U really did make me put my hands in my painties then my hands landed in my pussy i gummed so bad I had to change my bed sheets please keep writing more stories
Please keep writing
Ps I absolutely love you
In a sexual way
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Anonymous04/29/12
gah! ...nice... then GAH! again. ;)
I Thought the story was fairly hot, but it could've been better, had you handled the "resisting" bit with more...grace and fluidity. That said, nice work. Oh, by the way? & is NOT an equivalent replacement to "and". it's meant to be used sparingly, and frequently in lists etc. It may not bother some of the twits that commented here, but it really yanked me out of the immersion. "licked & sucked"? "sigh & moan & gasp"? REALLY? I had to copy/paste the damn thing and replace the &'s with "and"s and commas. You'd do yourself a favor if you did the same, in my opinion. Abent those two things though, again, nice work. ;)
I don't have any constructive criticism, I came hard. That's all.
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Anonymous03/06/13
more!
More! Does she get preggers? How many more cum does he do the first time.
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Anonymous04/02/13
Oh God More!!
Yes, please more!! Daddy needs to lose Jen & take his daughter with him. I'd love to read more... does she get pregs? does she share him with her friend? hmmm... i can see a small harem forming...
The story is great wish you would write more of it and have it longer, more details. PLEASE!
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Anonymous09/03/13
Love it!!!!
I **** like a rocket reading this,couple of times ;)nice work
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Anonymous05/01/14
I feel like I know Ivy
The first time is always scary, but it is so worth it. So thankful Ivy had a strong daddy, like mine, to hold her down and make her take it. Being rewarded with a pussy full of cum makes you forget why you fought against it in the first place.
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Anonymous04/16/15
Those ampersands...
I liked the story!
But please, do a search and replace on those ampersands, and replace them with 'and'. The whole thing will look much better.
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Anonymous10/04/15
To Anonymous Who Wrote This Comment: gah! ...nice... then GAH! again. ;)
I hope you learn more about grammar before attempting to school other people. It will behoove you to know when to use the word who instead of the word that. Your twit comment is beyond juvenile when one recognizes you should not use the word that in reference to an action being performed by people. You should have used the word who or whom. "The twits who " rather than 'the twits that" when composing your sentence. If you wish to be a grammar snob you should avoid such glaring mistakes. Having elipsis or elipses, especially when overused, is far more annoying than to see one use ampersands.
To the author:
Thank you for not falling into the same trap many others fall in while writing an erotic story. I appreciate stories which do not attempt to change female anatomy by placing the hymen as something internal. Please continue writing erotica, and I will continue to read your submissions.
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Anonymous01/26/17
I didn't even notice the ampersand, it was an amazing story!!!
Had me so wet and made me cum soooo hard!
Overall, it was GREAT!
English
Just three letters!
Is it so hard to type A-N-D? Stop overusing the ampersand!
Go read Shakespeare
What is wrong with you people???? What's wrong with &&&&??? Why does everyone keep harping on this? It means AND! It's the SAME THING!!! And it's a website for erotic literature. This story is hot no matter if there are &s or $s or any other symbols! Go read Shakespeare if you're looking for perfection!
great
hot and well written.....you can be my daughter any time
ty
good story, I enjoyed it very much, people need to chill this isn't Harvard it is a free website and this writing is very good
Haha
I never even noticed lol that dude at the botom is an idiot hah gj! 5/5
Best yet!
You know you are my favorite Author; and the picture you painted here had me as HARD as Daddy ;)
daddy got to cum twice and what a cumming it was
awesome love it daddy and ivy chapter two i could have gone on writing even more you had my cock so hard it hurt
but worth all the pain. reading this was like taking part getting the same of feeling about ivy. only wish there where more of this incredible hot horny story. brilliant thank you you very cleaver girl you. love your stories and the writing. most excellent.
wow
i am soo wet!! finished the last chapter with my hands in my panties...
Omg
U really did make me put my hands in my painties then my hands landed in my pussy i gummed so bad I had to change my bed sheets please keep writing more stories
Please keep writing
Ps I absolutely love you
In a sexual way
gah! ...nice... then GAH! again. ;)
I Thought the story was fairly hot, but it could've been better, had you handled the "resisting" bit with more...grace and fluidity. That said, nice work. Oh, by the way? & is NOT an equivalent replacement to "and". it's meant to be used sparingly, and frequently in lists etc. It may not bother some of the twits that commented here, but it really yanked me out of the immersion. "licked & sucked"? "sigh & moan & gasp"? REALLY? I had to copy/paste the damn thing and replace the &'s with "and"s and commas. You'd do yourself a favor if you did the same, in my opinion. Abent those two things though, again, nice work. ;)
Mmmm
I don't have any constructive criticism, I came hard. That's all.
more!
More! Does she get preggers? How many more cum does he do the first time.
Oh God More!!
Yes, please more!! Daddy needs to lose Jen & take his daughter with him. I'd love to read more... does she get pregs? does she share him with her friend? hmmm... i can see a small harem forming...
Great story
The story is great wish you would write more of it and have it longer, more details. PLEASE!
Love it!!!!
I **** like a rocket reading this,couple of times ;)nice work
I feel like I know Ivy
The first time is always scary, but it is so worth it. So thankful Ivy had a strong daddy, like mine, to hold her down and make her take it. Being rewarded with a pussy full of cum makes you forget why you fought against it in the first place.
Those ampersands...
I liked the story!
But please, do a search and replace on those ampersands, and replace them with 'and'. The whole thing will look much better.
To Anonymous Who Wrote This Comment: gah! ...nice... then GAH! again. ;)
I hope you learn more about grammar before attempting to school other people. It will behoove you to know when to use the word who instead of the word that. Your twit comment is beyond juvenile when one recognizes you should not use the word that in reference to an action being performed by people. You should have used the word who or whom. "The twits who " rather than 'the twits that" when composing your sentence. If you wish to be a grammar snob you should avoid such glaring mistakes. Having elipsis or elipses, especially when overused, is far more annoying than to see one use ampersands.
To the author:
Thank you for not falling into the same trap many others fall in while writing an erotic story. I appreciate stories which do not attempt to change female anatomy by placing the hymen as something internal. Please continue writing erotica, and I will continue to read your submissions.
I didn't even notice the ampersand, it was an amazing story!!!
Had me so wet and made me cum soooo hard!
Overall, it was GREAT!
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