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by vrosej1001/19/11

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Love the idea but this is way too long. The first stanza and all those like it are excellent. Edit like a bastard.

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by Liar01/19/11

"you may be a lover but you ain't no dancer"

Like the previous comment said, you have a lot of good stuff going on here. But I feel it is cannibalizing on itself by being just too...massive. Lots of ground to cover in the middle, and I'm exhausted when I get to the last stanzas that again has some real gems in them.

"It's quite out of fashion for poetry to rhyme."

Who cares, when you do it just fine? :D

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