your stories only get better and better, i dont know how you find the stories bu find them you do, there not just good the excellent.
as good as they get, more please more .
The overall story was hot. It reminded me of my swinging days. However, there was much of the text I just skimmed over because the narration got tedious. Too much "As If," or "Like" kind of phrases. Also, a lot of the action was just glanced over. Feel free to get descriptive of the action. Build it up. I'm sure you'll get better with practice.
English
Less Talk, More Action
Maybe sexy, maybe erotic, definitely lukewarm. More heat, please, less chat.
Erotic Education
Thanks for the master lesson and all the sensual descriptions! This story created a vivid picture of swingers. It's a education and a hot read!
gettting it on with another woman love it
your stories only get better and better, i dont know how you find the stories bu find them you do, there not just good the excellent.
as good as they get, more please more .
As if...
The overall story was hot. It reminded me of my swinging days. However, there was much of the text I just skimmed over because the narration got tedious. Too much "As If," or "Like" kind of phrases. Also, a lot of the action was just glanced over. Feel free to get descriptive of the action. Build it up. I'm sure you'll get better with practice.
great story
please write more
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