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an oration, a diatribe, but not (to my way way of thinking) a poem, so i feel unable to offer my comments on this as a poem.
I agree with previous
A political/philosophical manifesto, a spoken-word monolouge. Typical in that genre with it's repetition and escalation. And as such, quite good.
But poem? Eh, depends on one's definiton, I guess.
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an escalation
of the situation
is salvation
the black & red
don't mean Stendal
PHD in what BTW?
Mongoloid mental midgets is not PC, and cheap BTW
I gave you 100
this time
The format......
.....put me off from the start. Do you read your poems back to yourself? Aloud? I think you'd have less typos etc and also start to feel rhythm more - which is lacking in your work. Keep writing but try stepping down from the soap box first.
Tess
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Show not tell. That simple.
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