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by Anonymous

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by twelveoone01/26/11

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Biting, but I'm not in the mood for typing.
Read liked, easy 100

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by theognis01/26/11

*****

Five. As long as I'm allowed to think it means the next level of civilization is a level down.

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by Angeline01/26/11

Too ranty and too many local references

to really reach me as an observer outside the particular culture. It is well written and does it have good images? Yes because you know your way aound words and how to make them have an effect. But I think there are other ways to say this and to me it comes across as so polemic that the poetic potential feels smothered.

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by vrosej1001/27/11

I loved it.

In Aussie their called bogans. Lots of juicy images and it reminds me of people in my town. I am wondering given Angeline's comments whether this might be a brit/aussie thing.

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by Liar01/27/11

Overall good

Nice bite, and although I, like Angeline, don't quite get the references and the terminology, I feel the scenario is familiar enough to come across anyway.

A bit too didactic here and there. I guess you were coung for charicature, so maybe that's just right.

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by UnderYourSpell01/28/11

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Depressingly true I've seen them! My favourite line is '(the teenage fathers being otherwise detained)' very droll!

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by Esperanza_Hidalgo01/30/11

I heard

a DJ on a local radio station talking about the youngest grandfather in England. The kid was twenty-nine. Babies having babies perpetuates a cycle that seems unbreakable. Then we must feed everybody with subsidies because of guilt? It's difficult, because you don't want to see potential lost in future generations because of loss of sustenance. Is there an answer?

Maybe a more robust use of birth control.

Good work friday--enjoyed and rated perfect because the piece upset me.

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