All Comments on 'Home Cumming'

by Jesse1369

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digdaddyrichdigdaddyrichabout 13 years ago
I think it would have been better if it was written in the third person point of view

It seemed strained reading in the first person, like reading a letter written to someone else.

The dialogue part of the story was good, and the storyline was hot, with him being so much in love with his daughter and wanting her home and in his arms again.

Her wanting to be with him as much as he wanted to be with her was hot and one could imagine all of the hot sex they would be having all weekend long.

elusivetornadoelusivetornadoabout 12 years ago
great

whens the next one

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