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pretty good story
I hope the kid in the office didn't have to stay there till the next day when the Principal came back to work
:D
More please!
Nice story it was a fun and sexy ead. Thank you for sharing it!
Needs an editor
Solid basic storyline but it needs editing for grammar and spelling, plus fleshing it out. No pun intended, lol. Action lacks transitions. TFS
Agree with other comments
Nice story, could have had more to it and bit of editing but did enjoy it.
will look out for more
Thank You!
Thank you every one for your great comments! These were the first two stories I've EVER shared so I was a little nervous. And I thought the stories were going to be too long for the contests, I'm used to writing things much longer. The action is completely out of my virgin head so I'm a little vague about those things-- a factor my boyfriend I'm sure will soon rectify! I'll try to remember to keep posting, again thanks!
I lreally liked it. I liked it so much that I wish it was longer just so I could really get invested in these characters. Good job and hope to read more from you!
I enjoyed it, but somehow the characters didn't seem infatuated enough with each other to make going to bed together so quickly seem believable. It seemed like a nice romance that suddenly transitioned into a sex story.
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