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What She's Looking For

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous01/27/11

pretty good story

I hope the kid in the office didn't have to stay there till the next day when the Principal came back to work

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by meganjoadams01/27/11

:D

More please!

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by Anonymous01/27/11

Nice story it was a fun and sexy ead. Thank you for sharing it!

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by Anonymous01/27/11

Needs an editor

Solid basic storyline but it needs editing for grammar and spelling, plus fleshing it out. No pun intended, lol. Action lacks transitions. TFS

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by Kentish01/28/11

Agree with other comments

Nice story, could have had more to it and bit of editing but did enjoy it.
will look out for more

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by artimisschild01/31/11

Thank You!

Thank you every one for your great comments! These were the first two stories I've EVER shared so I was a little nervous. And I thought the stories were going to be too long for the contests, I'm used to writing things much longer. The action is completely out of my virgin head so I'm a little vague about those things-- a factor my boyfriend I'm sure will soon rectify! I'll try to remember to keep posting, again thanks!

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by Anonymous02/01/11

I lreally liked it. I liked it so much that I wish it was longer just so I could really get invested in these characters. Good job and hope to read more from you!

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by EesomeBeastie02/05/11

I enjoyed it, but somehow the characters didn't seem infatuated enough with each other to make going to bed together so quickly seem believable. It seemed like a nice romance that suddenly transitioned into a sex story.

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