All Comments on 'The Second Great Fire of London'

Five.

because it is very well written but, for me, too prosey. It reads more like an article than a poem. Imo the problem is the more poetic stuff is weighed down by the prosey parts. I think you should rework it because there is an excellent poem in there: you just haven't chipped the sculpture all the way out of the rock yet. :-)

Boy, she's tough. I gave it a 5, relieved that you are breaking out of the dreadful forms, but I would listen to her.

I gave it a four. I loved most of it but the last line killed it for me. It seemed to pat and you had already stated what has happen. I'm giving you a recommend though, cause I enjoyed the read anyway.

but think the last line isn't needed. Poetry does not need a morale at the end. All is the poem. The wording is nice to my ears.

so thanks to Vee for drawing my attention. There are some powerful images here. There were a couple of things: I would cut line 8, which felt too weak after the previous terrific line, and maybe line 9 is better at the end of the poem? And firefighters might be stronger than fire workers. Btw, have you read Nigel Balchin's wonderful blitz novel "Darkness Falls from the Air"?

A strong read, Annie x